Only A Layer

Only A Layer

A Poem by isabella
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A gruesome conceit about what my past means to me.

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My past is the dead skin around my feet.

It is the dry tips of my hair,

my yellowing toenail,

my bleeding blisters,

and my ugly scars.


Sometimes at the beach, alone,

I take off my heavy coat and I am only bone.

Without the superficiality,

I am free.


My skin peels off, some will watch with awe

as it falls on the floor

they’ll see, me, standing bare.


Others will stay fixated and stare

at the dead skin around my feet

the marks on my body from nail to teeth.

I’ll give them a spin,

because I know that no one has clear skin.


Yes, my body is full of imperfections

but it’s all a question of perception,

I wouldn’t feel complete

without the dead skin around my feet.



© 2017 isabella



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your first attempt is even quite interesting & a very thoughtful to be read along time. the depth of realistic thoughts, & a real pie of pleaded misery have u nicely pondered into the suchness of pleaful words. short. simple. & yet so effectively heartfelt as well.

ps.
past plays a very enormous role in everyone's life which further makes us all feel a bit imperfect, but also a big perceptive as well for no reason. liked these given lines:

"my body is full of imperfections
but it’s all a question of perception... "

rating: 100/100
nicely penned. lookin forward to reading ur work!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

Thank you for looking so deeply into my poem, I really appreciate it! I do have a few more poems and.. read more



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I have no words.....my voice is in my awe!! In faith, no words can do justice to what I'm left with after reading this. It's profound, it's solemn, it lives, breathes, and dances. Well done!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

3 Weeks Ago

thank you very much, I'm glad you like it!!
I am really liking this piece. It's very true that the past plays a big role in who we are today. You captured this concept perfectly.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

And unfortunately some people only see you for who you were before... thank you for your comment!
Kesha

7 Months Ago

Yes sadly they do. I know someone who used to think like that
I like that you got the rawness across very well in this piece. The imagery within the first few lines is very well done. I feel as though it's transformational piece, I interpreted the parts about your skin very literally, like you're shedding who you were, and describing how those around you feel about it. Some will notice your change, others will focus on who you used to be. I really enjoyed the read!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

That's really what I wanted to get through, I'm super glad you saw really deep into this, thank you .. read more
I liked the realistic words and thoughts.
"Yes, my body is full of imperfections
but it’s all a question of perception,
I wouldn’t feel complete
without the dead skin around my feet. "
Life is fair. We show real self to few people. Pealing back skin and allowing true face to be seen. Thank you Isabella for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

It is a pleasure! I'm glad you enjoyed, it is very satisfying to pour your soul out and to be apprec.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

I did enjoy. A outstanding poem.
I liked it. It's a shame I can't understand your other poems.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

Thank you! Awfully sorry, I do have some texts in french, spanish, a little portuguese. However I ha.. read more
review:
your first attempt is even quite interesting & a very thoughtful to be read along time. the depth of realistic thoughts, & a real pie of pleaded misery have u nicely pondered into the suchness of pleaful words. short. simple. & yet so effectively heartfelt as well.

ps.
past plays a very enormous role in everyone's life which further makes us all feel a bit imperfect, but also a big perceptive as well for no reason. liked these given lines:

"my body is full of imperfections
but it’s all a question of perception... "

rating: 100/100
nicely penned. lookin forward to reading ur work!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

7 Months Ago

Thank you for looking so deeply into my poem, I really appreciate it! I do have a few more poems and.. read more
This is so remarkable, each powerful echo of these metaphors coming to life through you. There are the dark edges of the soul that whisper into the night world around you; the death being shed yet clinging still. Amazing!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

9 Months Ago

At first, I was not going to write this poem about my past but more about my reputation. The image t.. read more
An owl on the moon

9 Months Ago

Even in your response to your writing there is the poetic heart walking the path between the seen an.. read more
The imagery is great. The rhythm is is not quite a defined. However, I don't think that matters all that much here. Thanks for sharing. If you make changes, looking forward to reading the next draft or even the final version.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

9 Months Ago

Agreed, I tried to add rhyme for a little more formality; but it is in free verse, I think it allows.. read more
Wow! I love it, it is simple in structure but just so beautiful and meaningful. It's exactly what i needed to read right now. Thank you!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

9 Months Ago

thanks so much, i'm really glad you like this poem as to me it was very risky by its gruesomeness..... read more
a first go and a good one! There will be no trace of the skin you have now in only a year. You are ready to move on.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isabella

9 Months Ago

thank you! I hope so!

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Added on January 17, 2017
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Tags: past, conceit, metaphor

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isabella
isabella

north, France



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Hi, I'm a 17 year old student in France. I am British, French and Brazilian. I'd describe myself as a very curious and sensitive person. I have a passion for the arts: drama, music (playing guitar, si.. more..

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