Beaded Tears

Title pretty much says it!

Beaded Tears

A teardrop weaves its way down my cheek

A frozen beaded, transparent

A salty trail left behind

The only evidence of my sorrows

The planet infested with life

I’m not alone

Another soul is

Crying a beaded tear

A necklace we could make

A lace to strangle those who caused this hurt

Author's Note

A sweet poem and then BAM! a surprise ending! Tell me what you thought!

Reviews

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

I think your right, very sweet with a twist of lime at the end, such a powerful read and good content... I have one recommendation, on the second line you might want to change the word beaded to bead. It flows better and causes the rhythm to remain consistant. Try it outloud first. It sounds better. The poem is Excellent either way, and you are a terrific writter and a great friend!!!!!!

[Zane]

OH MY GOODNESS. It was all, sad and innocent. And then KABLAMMO. You got all violent. :D It was a really good poem. I feel this reflects how sadness works with a lot of people

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

I really liked this one.

[J Michael Simmonds]

Wow, okay yeah your right...BAM. That was unexpected, sometimes I never understand poetry. Probably a reason why I write stories and novels. Good though.

[Liza]

so much transparency in your tears clearing the windows of your soul

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this poem a lot...I can relate to it...It was sweet in the beginning then it turned murderous. I think you did a splendid job. Thanks for sharing. :D

[Tony]

Struggle can create a strong bond between people.
I also saw the other side of this-- if someone or something creates to much suffering or whatever-- it can definately rise up or comeback around eventually on them. Love the metaphorical language you create-- very effective write.

[Linear]

I liked the poem, though the ending didn't surprise me, I also like the thought process behind the poem, life experiances aid us in our quest to write

[Marie Harrison]

What a strong wet chain that would make. Lovely.

[sarah]

Wow that really was a surprise great write!