He's There!

A poem of a haunting.

He's There!

 

As I sleep,

I can feel

his face

inches away

from my face.

 

I can feel his

cold icy breath

blowing on me

as I dream.

 

I can detect

his presence

as I try to lay

still and pretend

not to know.

 

But he knows

that I know

that he's there.

 

He laughs at

me in a deep

throaty laugh,

and I try to scream

but it's not a dream

my fear has a hold on me.

 

He's there to haunt me

and feel of me.

Reviews

[Molafvt]

Well if this is true we have a lot in common. I have actually had poltergeist experiences and they were freaky as Hell. I'm writing a story now, called "At The Top Of The Stairs" about my "first" Ghost encounter. God only knows when I'll finish it, but I will, in spite of myself. I love this poem of yours. I can see why you have a penchant for the "sinister". If this isn't just that, nothing is....! Great write and read, although I have a question about the wording of the last stanza.

"He's there to haunt me

and feel of me."
feel "of" me seems abstract and I'm not sure about the "of", but other than that, you brought back many a memory. This is a good write.

[Sean M. Addams]

really creepy piece ..love the visuals in this piece alot ... thought you did great on this rather spooky write ..nice job :)

[Norma M Sutton]

Hmmm I think I'd be drinking Coffee and RUM. Coffee to keep me awake and rum to deaden the fear lol and I don't DRINK lol

[Samuel Dickens]

If something like this was true, I imagine it would be very hard to take. I mean, how could you even sleep? Very effective writing, Marie.

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that makes you want to sleep doesnt it? LOL

[Nobody.]

Nice dark write. Really conveys the fear and cuts to the deeper part of my inner child. I was lost in the short rapid-fire bursts of thought you used....felt like an anxiety attck. really well done!
cheers!

[Star Wolf]

Now, this is really really spooky and creepy!

[Bubo]

But he knows
that I know
that he's there.

Compelling, and scary, something out of nightmares, or scenes of domestic violence, where one never truely escapes.