Whiskey Kiss

A love poem

 

“Whiskey Kiss”

 Closing my eyes tonight,

I taste your whiskey kiss on my

Lips and I smell the scent of your olive skin.

 

I recognize the familiar

Warm and snug embrace

Of your strong arms around

My curvy hips and my

Sleep is deeper on nights

That play out like this.

 

It’s your laughter and big smile

That I remember most often and

It’s your gentle companionship

That I miss the most.

 

But my love for you was

Not enough for both of us.

Your love for me was sweet

As almond honey to my

Lips but too weak to survive a lifetime.

For now your arms embrace

Another.

 

It’s bittersweet for me to

Linger in these memories

Of your love.

 

It makes me blue to admit

This but it’s time for me

To part with them.

I must let go

Of you now.

 

I vow that love for you shall

No longer grow

In my heart anymore.

I’ll need to make

Room for the future

Love for a heart that

Is true and baby

That’s not you!

 

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Great piece.. the flow wasn't very smooth for me, but I don't think it needs to really glide in this piece.. the situation itself can be jarring, and the poem wasn't that uneven.
I too think you could omit the "It's bittersweet" stanza, and perhaps the exclamation point at the end.
Otherwise, excellent job. c:

-Coral-

[Michael of Gilead]

Nicely done, I think you could have omitted or worked in the "it's bittersweet" stanza, otherwise very heartfelt

[deeps]

I’ll need to make
Room for the future
Love for a heart that
Is true and baby
That’s not you!

I love these words here, This is one amazing write.
I love the flow of this write.