My Mom

We'll meet soon

She is standing there

In her blue dress

That is blown by the friendly breeze

 

Her hair is silky straight

I got her big eyes

And her thin lips

 

She smiles as if it’s the last

She talks with the wind

She moves with grace

 

Ah! She’s perfectly lovely

I can imagine

Pieces and pieces of her senses

 

She is lovely

She is beautiful

Though I haven’t seen her even once

I know she is beautiful 

 

Author's Note

I am always dreaming of seeing my real mother one day. She left without a word and trace, but I know I will be able to understand whatever the reason is. I love her, no doubt with that. Some said she's a whore, but who cares? We all have only one mother, and loving them is the only way we can feel how to be a child. Perhaps, I haven't been a daughter before. But I am myself now, so maybe..just maybe, I can be a daughter someday.

Reviews

[Shannen Forrester]

Beautiful piece and I'm sorry for the lateness of this review once again.
Being a daughter is about accepting a parents love and appreciating it, you'll do fine, trust me :)

[SimpleMind]

Thanks Shazza! I guess I will someday :)

[Shannen Forrester]

I know you will

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such a mournful and yet hopeful piece. I think this is absolutely beautifully done. I love the description of your mother, and the ending is like a stab in the heart "Even if I haven't seen her even once". Beautiful.

I would maybe suggest, in the line "Even if I haven't seen her even once" a little change...maybe something like "Though I haven't seen her even once"--just the two "even"'s in on sentence throws off the reading.

Overall...strikingly beautiful.

[SimpleMind]

Thanks! I wouldn't be able to figure that one myself >.<

And thanks for liking my piece :)

[Keith LaFountaine]

Powerful poem, great description and lots of emotions packed into such a small, condensed space. I too never met my mother, so I know the feeling behind this. It's uplifting, and that's the kind of feeling we all want to feel when we think of the person who brought us into the world. Excellent writing, keep it up!

[SimpleMind]

Thanks :)
I'm sorry to hear that. But we can always think that it's better this way. :)

[gombeggar]

cherish yer mother...and keep yer dream of seeing her one day

[SimpleMind]

I will...thanks for dropping :)

[blueholmes]

i don't know what to say :)) it's just amazing how you praise your mom though fate never brought you together , i felt the love so tender, the emotion, the message, all well conveyed.. i wish all sons and daughters be like you .. (teary eyes ^_^) cheers cheers please :)) you're a great daughter remember that my friend :)

[SimpleMind]

Thanks my friend :)
Well, we all are in our own ways. Again, maraming salamat talaga!

[blueholmes]

ieeh!! no problem my friend :)) pen on!! (i learned that from here haha :))

[Frieda P]

So wonderfully warm and comforting until the end, it chilled my soul, such a sad yearning, it made my heart ache for you...poignant read.

[SimpleMind]

Thanks Frie...!

[esperanza]

I like it good job and question 2 is up for "You Ask " .

[SimpleMind]

Thanks for the read :)

[esperanza]

No problem and could you check out question 2 in "You Ask" thanks .

[Zap-the-awesome]

Good writing. X)

[SimpleMind]

Thanks :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The poem is moving! very realistic and full of emotion. I remember my Mom, she is always beautiful, just like what you expressed in this poem. Those sweet memories with our mother will always linger in our my mind and it is rooting deep in anybodys heart. Our Mom is the most beautiful person in this world that we can't afford to loss. Love this piece! Thanks for sharing!

[SimpleMind]

Welcome :) I just thought maybe by sharing this I'm gonna be at least an inch more closer to my mom...I hope she's fine wherever she is.. one thing for sure, she's as beautiful as yours ;)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks :) cheers!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I wish you will find her someday, don't stop believin.

[SimpleMind]

I won't :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Cheers!

[junaid altaf]

mother............
from where life flows..........

[SimpleMind]

from where it all began.....

[junaid altaf]

exactly