Hot Water

Hot Water

A Poem by clairvoyantmars

What would it feel like if hot rain fell from the sky?

Burning and scorching all the passersby

We’ll wonder if God’s angry and had to cry

Those bittersweet tears that were wholly divine

 

What are those bright stars that fall from your eyes?

They land on my shoulder and stain your goodbyes

Save and collect them until the right time

Return them to the heart that used to be mine

© 2011 clairvoyantmars


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This is very well written. In short you described many emotions. I like this a lot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, that was very inspirational! I loved the emotion put into the piece and everything that came along with it. There is so much depth and I loved reading it. Imagery and rhyming was a nice touch. Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very sweet with a tinge of sadness at the end, nicely written

Posted 12 Years Ago


Oh this is beautiful, what wonderful imagery and use of imagination. I especially love the last stanza...brilliant use of word imagery and emotion. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I tend not to like rhyming poetry, but I like this. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This one is very meaningful for the times.
I really like the emotional imagery you portray in your poetry.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great poem. I love the feeling and the words flow well. Great job!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


A cold trickle..
Or a warm wax candle.

Well written. I enjoyed reading. The ideas in the poem raise many different issues. A real thinking trigger...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Some good questions in your poem. If God ain't pissed off yet. He must be blind or sleeping? We need to hold on to the stars and keep hope alive when we are sad. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Whoa. This peom gives me the shivers. I love all the expression you show to this. Great work. Oh, I also love the details. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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clairvoyantmars

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I've been seriously starting to write my own novels since 2008. So far, I've finished three novels and have a lot of unfinished ones piled up. I also write short stories and poems and the occasional s.. more..

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