Opposing View Points

This is the second chapter that i wrote on CALC... yup hope you like it. Took a long time to make this because i had to review about what happened in my last chapter.

“Hm…” the captain smirked as the “atom” ship came into a raging battle with the five enemy ships.  “Scan the ship again and try to establish a Light communications with the Allied ship,” Captain MT. ordered.  “Incoming!” was the last thing anyone of them heard.  “What happened?” MT. asked as his vision started recovering from the white, blinding flash of light.  His ears were ringing and eyes were out of coordination.  Slowly recovering, Captain MT realized that he was still sitting in his chair, with none of his crew aboard.  “I need answers,” he finally recovered and strutted to find his team. 

“Huh? What’s happened?”  The alarm had just gone off, plus a robotic voice explained that the ship is under attack, taken little damage.  He heard footsteps closing in on him; MT. grabbed out his gun, quickly aiming at the direction of the sound.  “Don’t shoot!”went a familiar voice, as two figures emerged from the shaded darkness.  “Please, Captain, we only wanted to help,” came the other figure voice.  He could tell there were two of them because the sounds came from two different sides.  “SB? EO?” he asked in a quick and out-of-breath tone.  “Yes, Captain,” as they both uncovered themselves from the shaded part of the room.  “Hm… why did they conceal themselves and not let them show themselves…” he thought deeply, but was interrupted by a robotic voice.  “Impact in less than 30 seconds…”  “Impact in less than 30 seconds…” the same voice was repeating itself, but in a much quicker tone each time. 

“I want SB on offensive systems and EO on defensive systems; I will take the engines and repair stations,” MT. ordered quickly, because he knew there was no time to waste.  “Sir?”  Asked Lt. EO, “Aren’t the defensive systems over there?”  “I don’t know, but those are probably it…” he was curious about this ship, too.  She was pointing at a trash can-looking-like-thing, before and it really did look like a trash can!  “Incoming contact in, 5…4…3…2…1…” Snap!  The sound was an awful snapping sound, like a tree being snapped in half, but adding a scraping the chalkboard-with-your-fingernail sound. 

“Sir,” SB finally spoke, “Hull is lightly damaged, shield is at 25%, and 50% of our weapons are operational.  Ready to fire on your command.”  “Fire at will and track targets carefully,” Captain MT. spoke harshly.  Another missile struck them, only hitting them hard on starboard.  The ship started toppling back and forth, trying to maintain balance.  “Shields holding?” the Captain asked.  “Barely sir; they are only at 4%.  We will take serious hull damage if we get hit again,” SB replied.  “EO!” Change the shield chip to a new one and replace the system navigational control’s chip,” the Captain ordered as he saw another missile being directed towards him. 

“Done!” She said happily.  Snap!  Scrape!  Shields are holding at 98% and navigational controls are now online,” SB reported, as sparked wires and electricity seemed to be all over the place.  “Wait sir!” EB came up with plan, but her past plans usually failed, do to some erroneous bug or glitch in the system.  “If you have a plan, I will be glad to be enlightened!” the captain made his way over to EB.  She whispered in his ear and said that he that was a pretty good plan.  SB could only sigh to that remark because he knew it wouldn’t work.  “Ok,” MT started,” fire up the engines and turn 54° to port,”  “Why do we want to face towards them?  Won’t that just damage our hull even more?”  SB asked out loud, but got no reply. 

“Incoming!” But it was too late; the energy hit them in the dead center, causing a power fluctuation and momentarily stopping the ship.  “Ok wait for it…” the captain looked directly at the opposing ship as another missile was about to detonate in front of him.  Boom! The ship’s hull and shields were reaching critical for low power.  “Now!”  Just as the energy surged past and through the ship, the sub-warp engines started, it causing the ship to spin out of control in space.  More and more missiles of blue and green flew past them, as they floated out into the middle of nowhere in space.  “Sir?” SB asked, “Are we still floating and spinning out of control, out in space?”  “Yes, we are SB,” the Captain said, looking out through the window.  The sparkling stars moving uncontrollably as the ship moved on.

Reviews

[Mica]

Waiting for this chapter was most definitely worth it!
Your descriptions in the beginning of the first chapter like "...eyes were out of coordination" are very unique and easy to picture. As well as your last sentence. That was really neat
Keep writing! :D

[Sci-Fan]

Not bad for this story... you could use some work on putting the names of the initialed names like EB or SB... who are those people and their backgrounds.