Place on a Hill

There's a Hill, It’s tall but not wide.

 

It’s leafy but has no tree's, with a clear sky.

 

It’s raining, the water ice cold in the summer air.

 

The Hill has tall grass but it only reaches an inch.

 

The Hill is covered with grass, surrounded by plains.

 

There is a small cottage on top of the hill but the hill has no top.

 

You can go up the Hill but you can't go down.

 

This hill his breezy and warm, yet still and quiet.

 

If you stand on the Hill you can see your house, but it’s not yours.

 

You can see the stars, the sun shining bright.

 

The wind is still and calm, as the tree's hold no leaves, but flowers.

The cottage is quiet and ever been opened.

 

 

You climb up the Hill and go towards the cottage but it’s not there.

 

The cottage is there, the chimes slowly making noise from the still breeze.

 

You walk into the cottage and open the window, looking towards the trees.

 

The grass is swaying in the breeze while the sky is clear and content.

 

How is all this possible you ask? It’s an everlasting thought…

 

Opening and closing vast doors each night and each day,

 

Until suddenly, you fall

 

You fall and fall, breaking into a cloudy daytime sky,

 

Covered with stars, a midnight breeze to match

 

You realize you’re standing, suspended high in the air

 

Taking a seat to rest your soul, as everything starts to calm once again

 

You look far into the distance, knowing the end is near

 

You see a beautiful sight, A Place On A Hill

 

Author's Note

This is a more new version of an old piece of writing... Still beautiful to me.

Reviews

[Anna a. S.M.]

Fantastic! It feels like being in a different reality.

[Lily Mae]

I felt as though I was there.. walking along side of each word...xx

[Life Is like Trust...It..]

Fantastic poem but I kinda got lost. I could see every detail perfectly...beautifully even. But the last part disappeared from the rest.
'unless you're dreaming of course' doesn't really end my taste. I would think more of 'How is this possible you ask? It will. Consentrate enough and you'll find that you were dreaming.' See I kept your idea but changed it up. Hope you take my advice ^-^ goodluck

[Jacques]

your style which you've used in this poem is certaintley promising and brings something fresh and exciting . i like this poem because you're describing to us of this place and everything and there's no pictures but you paint a world so perfectly , it's so easy for us to picture it . great work , great detail . keep it up

[LunarSong]

I like this, especially the end with It's not. unless you're dreaming of course...

[emmajoy]

This is as near surreal as you can get with these pictures without substance .. your thoughts and ability to write them down is amazing and shows great promise.

Please though, do take more care .. many if not all of your posts have had a fair amount of Views but people are apt to steer away from carelessness.