Squishy Ending / Morbidly Friends Forever

A crazy experiment, full of secret meanings and hidden agendas... O.o

 

Squishy Ending

 

Morbidly Friends Forever

Seething, burning, manifesting,

Overflowing like a bath-top when one corpse too many breaks the surface,

Blood fleeing like steamy breath on a high cliff viewing the ocean,

And the dot with heavy feet and land-locked wrists free-falling into blue.

 

Puff the magic dragon,

Puffy water-bloated bodies limply dangling on the surface,

Blue meets green but red has its own agenda and the machine picks up,

"Leave a message. I'm out playing with friends forever."

 

Q: Friends? Forever?

Doesn't make much difference when maggots find the eyes

the most interesting meal to evolve out of.

(Does a fly remember fine dining?)

 

A: Maybe to help pull the meat from the marsh and pry open clamshell ribs to retrieve leady bits entwined in juicy upholstery.

 

...Nothing lasts forever...

 

 

 

Reviews

[Anastasia]

I love your writing! I want to know your secret meanings and hidden agendas though. This is really great, wonderfully written. Thank you for sharing Your Favorite Creation with me. It means alot. If I had seen it beforehand, I would have read it anyway. The title intrigues me from the get-go. What can I say? You had me at hello.

[Monday Parker]

Very good poem, decriptive....Only the large size and word format kinda take away from your poem! Great job!

[Dulce de Leche]

I got an image of blood droplets floating in shiny water while I read this. Wonderful. I love it.

[zig]

yes yes yes! some people like poetry that leaps off the page and really touches them, i like poetry that leaps off the page kicks me in the neck and tosses me down a flight of stairs. very well written. so glad i discovered this site... and this group

[Jaffa Forbes]

very random and probably very clever, I just don't understand it! I shall leave that to other people I think.
good write
jaff

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a bit over the top the areas, but I can hardly fault you for that since it is quite clear that you were enjoying yourself with this one. Maggots in eyes...perfect line to read before bedtime. :)

[Chris Zahar]

Morbid, but far more three-dimensional than most of the Gothic crap that I'm reading nowadays. Yeah, it talks about maggot ridden corpses and dead bodies, but it's balanced with this very cutsey pooh yin (puff the magic dragon, and cute words like "puffy" and "squishy").

[The Elder Pine]

I think you acheive your desired affect. The dual meaning of the lines are indeed clever and horiffic. Well done with this piece.

"Seething, burning, manifesting,

Overflowing like a bath-top when one corpse too many breaks the surface,

Blood fleeing like steamy breath on a high cliff viewing the ocean,

And the dot with heavy feet and land-locked wrists free-falling into blue.


Puff the magic dragon,

Puffy water-bloated bodies limply dangling on the surface,

Blue meets green but red has its own agenda and the machine picks up,

"Leave a message. I'm out playing with friends forever."


Q: Friends? Forever?


Doesn't make much difference when maggots find the eyes

the most interesting meal to evolve out of.

(Does a fly remember fine dining?)


A: Maybe to help pull the meat from the marsh and pry open clamshell ribs to retrieve leady bits entwined in juicy upholstery.


...Nothing lasts forever..."

[A Shell]

BWAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHA LOVE THIS POEM!!! the imagery is completely perfect! squishy and brilliant in it's darkness. paints an extremely clear picture...gives me the shivers. your poem is so creative and fun to read. The title is very catchy. WHO WOULDN'T BE INTRIGUED BY IT?! XXOXOXO