Adios (100 wd dialogue)

Adios (100 wd dialogue)

A Story by Constance
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This is a conversation I wish would have taken place, before things became worse. Me now, this is what I would have said and done. Me then was weak as water. 100 words of dialogue for the contest.

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"Good morning, dear. A cellphone bill came in the mail today. I ordered an itemized one, to see why it was so high..."

 

"Y? Gorda, why do you always question? Better to just pay..."

 

"Oh, I paid the bill... after I called the number you spent hours on the phone with. I recognized her voice... You never spent five minutes calling home to me, your WIFE!"

 

"You called Lena? What! What did you say ? Dios mio... jealous child!"

 

"I told her she should be ready to receive you and your things. I spent the morning packing for you. Adios, Ricardo."

 

© 2008 Constance


Author's Note

Constance
Just 100 words of dialogue for a contest here on the cafe. Based on my own experiences, and real conversations, and what I SHOULD have said.
Explanation of Spanish dialogue for those who don't know these few words:
Y? = and what? Gorda = fat girl, but is often used by Mexican males as a term of endearment toward their wife Dios mio= oh my God! adios= goodbye

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I'm so glad that at least you're no longer in that situation. Urgh, men! I loved the way you've written this, I had to read it twice just to absorb everything. Short but speaks volumes. A very gripping and outstanding piece. I loved the start and the finish. It seems exactly like a real conversation, I could hear the voices in my head. I wouldn't be surprised if you won this competition!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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AWESOME
FUNNY HOW I AM IN THIS EXACT PREDICAMENT WITH MY PARENTS RIGHT NOW...Cheers and Congrats on winning first place with this piece!

Laura

Posted 15 Years Ago


I'm so glad that at least you're no longer in that situation. Urgh, men! I loved the way you've written this, I had to read it twice just to absorb everything. Short but speaks volumes. A very gripping and outstanding piece. I loved the start and the finish. It seems exactly like a real conversation, I could hear the voices in my head. I wouldn't be surprised if you won this competition!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OUCH! good one.

"Oh, I payed the bill...
use paid.

thanks for submitting and good luck!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Constance
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