In OUR Universe

Try reading just the blue words... see what happens C

I pray tonight to never become immune
to this drug that's left my soul content
for I've found as home a blazing star
where WE is the only resident

No other need could I have but this
for I knew nothing of true desire
before tonight I'd never met the kiss:
salvation riding on one endless breath

In your gaze, your touch, I own the world
within our world, I need nothing more
I've found the place where I belong,
BEING I'd been forever yearning for

This woman never WAS before you... YOU
As the stars high in our universe unfold
within her soul, she knows you see them too
not even the unspoken is unshared here

Dreams are no longer imagined things...
What do I have left for which to pray?
To unutterable questions, there are answers
answers only comprehensible in our sway

Together we dance to the beating drum
lilted by the rhythm of life, by beauty:
the miracles within never exposed to some
choreographed in time with twin heartbeats

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a mythic, mysterious quality to your write... blending in the colors and the poem within the poem.... The dreamish flow and form so beautifully express the depth and richness of love that is overwhelming in its wonder. Amazing, elegant piece!

[Arthur Henn]

Beautiful heartfelt, soulful words written from the soul of ones heart. The words in blue are magical...

Thank you for sharing.

Art

[Jared]

I love that poem. THe form is insanely incredible! PLEASE keep writing!

[Millionth Muse]

This is like two beautiful poems in one. I love the interlacing of the hidden verse, because it is like a tiny offshoot of the original piece that says something a little more delicate and emotinal. The piece as a whole, though, is not without emotion--it is by far one of the most emotionally beautiful pieces I have read in quite some time. This is powerful stuff that got me thinking, or rather dreaming, about my own life and loves past and present. Beautifully worded and skillfully wrought.

[TAO]

My Constance, dear Constance... What can I say that could adequately capture the beauty of this poem? Well... I like the idea you came up with. I love the meaning and the entire picture it paints in my "We". You are already a striking and powerful voice in a chorus singing their song to the world, but this poem, Constance, is all the more powerful for what I can feel growing inside me every single day. Your words, my soul, are precious beyond even that which is deemed priceless. We love it, very much...and not just because we love you. Forgive that :) Well done, again, beauty.

[Constance-Outspoken]

Just in case anyone misses what the words in blue spell out, here's the hidden verse:
Tonight my soul is true desire
Riding on one endless breath
In the world where forever
You unfold unspoken dreams
We dance to the rhythm
In time with twin heartbeats