Disappointment

Creative Poetry Group... words given: vixenish, beguile, intrigue, ravishing, animalistic, carnal, treacherous, toxic

To a mother born, then never held
To father only burden,  not a gem
A barren life of disappointment
Until came ravishing womanhood
And the intrigue of enticing men

Vixenish, engineered to beguile
Her carnal appetite unfettered
Animalistic hunger uncontrollable
Treacherous line between toxic lust
And that feeling she really craved

To some a lover, but never loved
To others a doll, not human
A vivid life of disappointment
Until came inevitable maturity
And the prospect of dying alone

Reviews

[Art]

sadly when one is unloved there is the inclination to seek it at any cost ... and the realization becomes the inevitable... oh the disappointment...


nice work...

[Narnie]

I'd love to give this a full critique... am I allowed? The premise is perfect and well-told ... it deserves a second look?

[Poetic Beauty]

This is how many people are in life and it seems to start at an early age. Sex never replaces love and that took me a long time to recognize the difference. The idea of dying alone is a scary prospect indeed. You have made this poem spectacular with being blunt and open with this topic. It is good to see you writing again. Thanks for posting in the group.

[TAO]

Now, this is a bit heartbreaking. Of course, with what you've had to deal with, even from this one, it makes perfect sense. Tragic, beautifully written as always.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow you made great use of those words... some women want so badly to be loved that they give it up quickly... some men think that means she is easy and lose respect or only wanted it in the first place, either way she is left alone again... you poetry is as powerful as ever.

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Well done! Well said!

[Ed Hart]

after the shadow of 'ravishing' passes from her eyes, there is no chance that she would die alone...and dis-appointment, would find 'appointment', sure

[Crowley]

Its hard to me to have to use words and sometimes they seem so forced. but this was outstanding, I mean really, vixenish? Great job here I loved every last line.