Falling in Love

Oh, how I miss
Our late night talks
I wish to have our first kiss
With you by my side I want to walk
On the sparkling shore
Until we can't see no more

I can't fight this feeling anymore
It's building up inside of me
I can't seem to think straight
You are always on my mind

When you call me Gorgeous
It makes my heart leap
Your smile is so contagious
You make me laugh myself to sleep

Then you disappeared
I have not heard a word
My heart starts to ache
Maybe my emotions were fake

Please come back to me
So I can know for sure
If my heart was true
That I am falling in love with you

Reviews

[Stefanie Holmes]

"Until we can't see no more" You have double negatives in this line, it should read "Until we can't see any more"

I really loved this piece. The classic tale of a love, lost. You portrayed it with a personal flair, which makes it truly believable and heartbreaking for the reader.

~Stefanie

[Casey Francis]

This was extraordinary. You have obvious talent. I will definitely be reading more of your work!

[Criss ;)]

It's now totally a heartfelt piece you made, I really very enjoyed it. 100/100 :) Keep it up :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! :) Glad u enjoyed reading it!!

[Sami Khalil]

A sweet and emotive write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[The Invisible Girl]

Thank you for reading! :) :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[The Invisible Girl]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)...........

[The Invisible Girl]

Lol ^-^ :)

[Sami Khalil]

:)............

[17thWhitePrince]

A beautiful piece indeed !!! Thanks for writing and for sharing :D

[Horizon K.]

Oh to pine for that crush! I know this feeling and so well expressed here:) I hope he returns...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Very sweet touching, emotional, heartfelt read.
I hope he comes back to you soon :)
Great write :)