She became a survivor

She became a survivor

A Story by Jada Johnson
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inspired by the movie "hotel rwanda"

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this was a raging war, close enough to a nightmare. her heart began to crumble as she heard the people beg for their lives, her eyes felt like they were soaked in fire, and her body was shattered. she became furious and soft all at once. her family had passed right in front of her innocent eyes. the pain divided her soul into two, the separation from her family has given her no hope to be alive. the world seemed like it was no longer some where to live in, there was no place to survive, and all she could do is cry. The intruders were fearless, wicked, and heartless. it was that moment, when she realized her life became pointless. she wondered what she could have done to save her loved ones, she wondered why they were taken, she wondered how could someone do such a thing. the village was no longer safe, the space between her painful thoughts was enough to leave her speechless. the intruders had found her now, one last look at the people who took her family lives and now she was next. one last thought to herself, one last breath, this was it, life was fading and her heart was racing. her bold and furious eyes had produced falling tears that resembled every single member in her family. but there was no chance of another life being taken away, she had just found an escape. the bus that came by was a sign of released pain and glory. she ran her heart out, all the flashbacks of her life was revisiting her mind as she runs for safety. the intruders came running behind with such power, as if she had done wrong, this was all so wrong, no care in the world for this young little girl. she made it on and suddenly the pain was gone. the blood across her face was a memory of what she had just lost. her hand against the window marked her victory and the death of her family. the bus was on its way, slowly passing by her people, two hands on the window, tears begin to cover her delicate face, and there she goes leaving with such a corrupted soul, the village was taken over, and “she became a survivor”.

© 2017 Jada Johnson



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This is a nicely raw & powerful piece of imagination based on true events. It's actually much more interesting & compelling than the movie you were inspired by. Your pacing is well done and good use of dynamic verbs. Contrasts are sprinkled here & there, each one well-constructed to leave the reader with something thought-provoking. Fondly, Margie

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This is a nicely raw & powerful piece of imagination based on true events. It's actually much more interesting & compelling than the movie you were inspired by. Your pacing is well done and good use of dynamic verbs. Contrasts are sprinkled here & there, each one well-constructed to leave the reader with something thought-provoking. Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really a nice work and the ending of story is amazing "she became a surviver ",enjoyed it alot ,thoughts in this piece of writing are impressive..wow.❤❤

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words love
This was truly engaging and really enjoyed it as well as your different style of writing

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Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you, means a lot
War over nothing, messed up right? You made these four words here mean a lot. It was everything then it was nothing it was all she had...an opportunity to become.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you so much
Wow! You had me completely immersed into the fabric of this little one's experience from the start. Though I usually get distracted by serious lack of standard punctuation and formatting [example, no paragraph breaks], in this case it may have worked reasonably well albeit perhaps not the way in which most publishers might be comfortable.

I really really like it [smile].

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Jada Johnson

2 Weeks Ago

yeah when it comes to my writings, I'm aware my punctuation will leave people feeling awkward and un.. read more

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