Feels the same

Feels the same

A Story by Jada Johnson
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you ever feel like the world is spinning but you feel like things still remain the same?

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there she stood everything was quiet not a sound around nothing heard externally.. simply the sound of all the madness in her mind. all the thoughts she couldn’t quiet and the music she couldn’t turn off, the regret that insisted on nagging, the memories that crushed her soul, and the love that had nowhere to go.

 now things just feel like a hit and run,  she was the only one left behind but she picked herself up off the road and limped to safety trying to find the pieces she gave you lying in a ditch. 
she dusts them off, puts them back together, and try’s to get on with her life like always. in that moment, her eyes have lost its ability to blink and her lungs have forgotten how to breathe, and she realizes that the world is much bigger than any pain you feel. where must she go from here, she tells her self you’d think I moved on, but there are times when it hits her vigorously she can’t move. just when she thought she could move on with herself, she supposes it will all make sense one day. 

its not even about her heart anymore, her soul, it is what breaks her now, all the reasons she should start moving on, all loosing sense, all slowly gone. her body is weak, she feels like her heart is giving up. she wanted to be a drop in the rain, a pang in your heart, with the water beating on the window pane, taking you back to our start. it was on this day she decided she was tired of the sidelines. life had been passing her by for some time and she wanted to feel it again. it was also on this day she decided she was fragile and easily shaken, alone and emptied of everything she had. but she’s gone. 

the girl that now stands in her place has strong steps and steady hands, steel in her eyes and iron under her skin. the energy that flowed through her veins when her body started craving your touch again made her believe that maybe if she held you close enough, her pain will release. there was a time when words were easy where things could flow without a care in the world but when she's around you all words leave her and she's left with a head full of misery, air colours have changed and she has rearranged but she still “ feels the same.”

© 2017 Jada Johnson



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“Simply the sound of all the madness in her mind.”- raw, poignant line. Great ‘hit and run ‘ metaphor in this well-written story. First two lines of second paragraph are brilliant. Love the stream of consciousness style and flow of this story and the self-analytical internal monologue of the protagonist. Eloquent with beautiful imagery. Well- done!

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Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you Annette, i really appreciate you analyzing my work to the fullest.. this means a lot.
Annette Pisano Higley

1 Week Ago

My pleasure to read your work Jada.



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LOVED the imagery and the passion with which the poem was written. Some of the lines stood out and added a metaphorical beauty to the whole work as a whole. Keep writing

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Jada Johnson

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i love your insight on this!

& thank you for taking the time to review my poem :)
“Simply the sound of all the madness in her mind.”- raw, poignant line. Great ‘hit and run ‘ metaphor in this well-written story. First two lines of second paragraph are brilliant. Love the stream of consciousness style and flow of this story and the self-analytical internal monologue of the protagonist. Eloquent with beautiful imagery. Well- done!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you Annette, i really appreciate you analyzing my work to the fullest.. this means a lot.
Annette Pisano Higley

1 Week Ago

My pleasure to read your work Jada.
It's obvious that you're a poet. Even in stories your words have a rhythm and a certain flowery quality about them that makes the words beautiful to read. There are a lot of grammatical and punctuation mistakes. If you partnered with someone who was good at editing you'd be a force to be reckoned with!

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Jada Johnson

1 Week Ago

thank you for taking the time to review this, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Jada Johnson

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