Never Ending You

A poem from long ago, debating how I will reap, what I might sow.

I wait at the door, locked and sealed shut,

My heart, torn, worn, and cut,

Will you answer me, will you see my pain,

Or am I a Man, only gone insane,

Is this what Love does to your creation,

Breaking away incredible sensation,

You know the future, the first and the last,

To you my sins should be cast,

I try to understand your ways,

Never have I gone so long without sitting by the bay.

I ask for an answer, should I ask, or should I go,

Will I reap what I sow?

The voices fight inside my head,

All night I lay on my bed,

I cannot decide what I must do,

Tears fall on my checks while I don’t know what to pursue,

Questions arise all around me, doubt fills my soul,

Are you or her my one true goal?

Despite all this I find within your arms happiness and grace,

Oh the day I cannot wait to see you face to face,

In the end, faith and trust in you, is what I shall do,

For you are the Creator, the first, the last, the never ending you

Reviews

[Tim Buckley]

I know it is really hard to write & express feelings about an endless topic such as God. The only constructive thing--or at least one constructive thing--is that I couldn't quite get my teeth into the topic. You seem to be standing on the border about love, happiness & you even throw a girl in there, to humbleness over you realizing you are a sinner.
One more thing: Do you know what "meter" is in poetry? You don't have to use meter, but if you ever want to write a sonnet you will. OK "Hep Cat."
TimB

[Rebecca Buller]

"Oh the day I cannot wait to see you face to face,
In the end, faith and trust in you, is what I shall do,
For you are the Creator, the first, the last, the never ending you"

Such a beautiful message, Corwin. This is actually the first of your work that I've read and I'm so glad I did. I'll have to read more of your writing. Thank you for sharing this:)

[Corwin T.]

Thank you for your kind words!! I will be happy to check out your writing as well and do a review on a piece later this evening! If you are interested in poems, the one I just posted "The Curse" will be of interest to you! Anyways, thank you for your review! I look forward to reading some of your work!

[Rebecca Buller]

You're very welcome and I'll certainly have to check out "The Curse". I think I'd intended to click on that one, but I saw this one and decided to click on instead. Either way, I'll have to check it out:) :)

[Nix]

A wonderfully written piece. Great message and a good twist. I wasn't aware that it was talking about God until the end, and that makes it all the more powerful. A decent rhyming scheme that could be touched up a bit. And the rhythm is a little awkward at times but overall an AMAZING poem. Great job Corwin!

[Corwin T.]

Thanks N.B. I always try to keep the reader guessing until the end in a poem of this situation. Thanks for the review!!!