Fake

Snooty girls

So pretty girl I see you got it all

Bleach blonde hair and standing tall

Your sorority and friends love you

Living hard, Dying hard

Ever took a look at who you really are?

Never worked a day in your life

A faked up spoiled girl

A mommy and daddy that gave you the world

Fancy car, purses and drugs galore

Some would even call you a w***e

Finding comfort with the beer and weed

As long as you do good in school dad picks up the receipt 

You think your a woman who knows it all

But all you are is a junkie waiting to fall

Listen here child, open an ear

Value what you were given

Because the end is near

Grow up, use your brain 

Your parents seem not to care

Though your driving them insane

Wake up, Stop being fake

Reviews

[mcg03002]

This is a harsh piece of poetry. Great job conveying your frustration and disdain. I've met people that have made me feel the same way. I wonder, has the subject of this poem ever read it?
In line 13 you need to use the word "you're" rather than "your." The second to last line has the same typo.
I love what you've created here. In your comment on my piece, "Reluctance," you said that you would like to write on the same level that I do. I make no claim of being a great writer...but, wherever I am on the scale, you are right there with me. You have a lot of talent. Maybe we can learn from one another.
Great work! I look forward to reading more.

[Kristopher]

It should be "you're" in the 13th line.


I hate people like this... and even though it's such a distasteful topic (as in much disliked not poorly picked) you wrote a very poetic piece about it.
Bravo

[loowzerX]

this is amazingly realistic. well done!

[Hope]

This is very true about many girls.. to many girls..
you made a s****y topic poetic :)

[*Evelen*]

Wow this is an amazing piece. Wonderfully writen and very strong. I couldn't stop reading. I could picture the girl and someone yelling this at her while flashes of her laughing with her friends, drinking beer, and smoking weed. Well done.

[Kiddx]

Grow up, use your brain
Your parents seem not to care
Though your driving them insane
Wake up, Stop being fake

Hope you don't mind me putting this here.
I love these lines so truthful and wonderful.
This is amazing I like your write

[Corey Zupka]

thanks MCG, I love the advice, and I still dont think we are on the same level, but, I suppose I could agree on that. I look forward to reading your work as well, and learning from each other.

[RosylnPeaches]

Very well spoken and beautifully written, really makes you listen.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is outstanding. It is easy to fall into drugs. I lost two brothers to them. I like the strength and good advice given. A very good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Corey Zupka]

Thanks, yeah I just posted under poetry, but it is more lryical content