Hyena

Hyena

A Poem by lee von cleef
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Alzheimer's, Legal incarceration ,wealth redistribution

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Nothing of value is won without sacrifice
Individuals will be punished for their transgression

Surrounded by bone crunchers, the memories flood back
Slipping along an abandoned tangle
Spilling into unknown depths;
Smells, sounds, emotions, actions,
Swinging her jacket, the pack slinks to the chain link’s dark edges
Snared
Sorry Vampires of life weather her Alamo
Sailors take warning, Red sky at morning envelops Casey’s gift
Sacrifice, Width and breadth of emotions will be the last to go
Epic    
Stalkers, The voyeurs, chuckle
Straining our ponytail pigeon panics to a tethered end.
Swashbuckling corporate surrogates
suckle their dementia cattle into another squeeze shoot.    
Strike success for keypad containment ,bruised blue palms n knuckles
Soul solicitor let the feather float free. Amen .
L.V.C.                     

© 2012 lee von cleef


Author's Note

lee von cleef
The "system" is a reflection.

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These are original thoughts and images... very refreshing to see a writer charge the "boundaries"full tilt.. "surrounded by bone crushers"... "the pack slips to the chain link's dark edges"... there are others... I like to lean back in my chair and let your verses wash over my mind and stir my reflections

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Wow, this has a rhythm all it's own, I don't know which line I like best...but the end is a clincher.

'Soul solicitor let the feather float free'

'Amen' indeed.



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

thank you, I have not been at the Cafe long ,but it feels good to see a poems emotion keep floating .. read more
I like your structure. You are taming your wild creative mind here. Sometimes my friend we must sacrifice, for the readers sake. As for the content I found it not only moving but thought provoking, too. That first verse set a defiant tone but you softed as you went along. Talking about our loved ones/ can do this to us. Even the most hardened of us. This is evident in your final few verses. That release... Well penned, Lee

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

Yes this is a ongoing emotion, but when I wrote it was steam kettle corn hot caramel burning ,I want.. read more
A very powerful and gripping poem. Written very well with outstanding imagery. Losing one's memory is loosing everything and everything becomes a unknown. You describe the decline well here and how some come in to prey on those victims. Where there is money to be make nothing else matters.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

Good to know the poem painted the journey ,I try to embrace Kindness, compassion,so tough not to be .. read more
Love the ending, the sweeping and haste to the quiet 'Amen"

I don't like "epic" on its own line, especially since all of the other lines start with an 's' word, although it could be a blatant sign for the turning point in the poem. I enjoy the idea of incorporating the red sky and sailors bit, although it sounds muddled, or confused as is.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

Cool thank you,Emotion of making the family "A Visitor"to our mother,"Red Sky at Morning",a book,196.. read more
Nice poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


Alzheimer is truly the strongman that robs, I lost my Grandmother to it,lucky for me I looked like her so she was alway drawn to me though she nolonger remembered me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

Three sisters, I am a only son,(though she has raised many boys they would,work, visit, stay,grow)So.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

11 Years Ago

Sometimes polite laughter is called for, but I am all about the full belly laugh it truley is the me.. read more
These are original thoughts and images... very refreshing to see a writer charge the "boundaries"full tilt.. "surrounded by bone crushers"... "the pack slips to the chain link's dark edges"... there are others... I like to lean back in my chair and let your verses wash over my mind and stir my reflections

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

good use of language i like this style really enjoyed it

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Clever us of 's.' Not at all predictable, and it makes a great abstract. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lee von cleef

11 Years Ago

sssooo thankful..
nice...reads like the old beatniks...freeflowing

Posted 11 Years Ago



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