Hyena

Alzheimer's, Legal incarceration ,wealth redistribution

Nothing of value is won without sacrifice
Individuals will be punished for their transgression

Surrounded by bone crunchers, the memories flood back
Slipping along an abandoned tangle
Spilling into unknown depths;
Smells, sounds, emotions, actions,
Swinging her jacket, the pack slinks to the chain link’s dark edges
Snared
Sorry Vampires of life weather her Alamo
Sailors take warning, Red sky at morning envelops Casey’s gift
Sacrifice, Width and breadth of emotions will be the last to go
Epic    
Stalkers, The voyeurs, chuckle
Straining our ponytail pigeon panics to a tethered end.
Swashbuckling corporate surrogates
suckle their dementia cattle into another squeeze shoot.    
Strike success for keypad containment ,bruised blue palms n knuckles
Soul solicitor let the feather float free. Amen .
L.V.C.                     

Author's Note

The "system" is a reflection.

Reviews

[spiritwind]

These are original thoughts and images... very refreshing to see a writer charge the "boundaries"full tilt.. "surrounded by bone crushers"... "the pack slips to the chain link's dark edges"... there are others... I like to lean back in my chair and let your verses wash over my mind and stir my reflections

[SHEEMA HUQ]

sad and not at all predictable, many of the phrases have abstract connotations , perhaps comparible to the experiences of some sufferers of alziemers, nice write, well done.

[M.E.Lyle]

I've never seen anything like this. The S thing is clever.

[Muse]

I like your whimsy in this writing. The surreal imagery was nothing short of a masterpiece!

Muse

[emmajoy]

There's a true or maybe untrue flight of fancy here, a take-off into a sizzling adventure where things aren't what they might be. You use words with an S-shape skill and end up leaving the mind thinking .. 'must go back to the beginning'

'Straining our ponytail piegon panics to a tethered end' - i've no idea why that phrase calls out to me, maybe it makes a distinct picture .. has a good sound too when read aloud!

[Audrey Howitt]

Swashbuckling corporate surrogates
suckle their dementia cattle into another squeeze shoot.

Really well done!! I guess I agree with Emily Rose--I too really like the alliteration

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Swiss cheese is some pretty tasty stuff :)

[Emily Rose]

This is really lovely. I like the continued use of S words to start the lines, and the alliteration strewn throughout. It's very neat, and very artistically done, but still seems like the simple outpouring of the soul. (by the way: clouds are some of the most amazing things in the whole world)

[lee von cleef]

Soul my soul is Swiss cheese needing a good dose of time to stitch it back together, Thanks for the pat on the back.