If Love Fails

When a heart is afflicted by the seeds of love,
It spreads the disease to vein and bone;
But when love fails and sadness breaks,
The heart must shoulder it all alone.

 

If love be squeezed out from my last fibre,
I'll hope with every atom of my soul
That though my heart be torn to pieces,
I might someday be able to make it whole.

 

Though my heart may ache and my bones may break,
Though my eyes may cry and my tears run dry,
I won't give up; I won't back down;
I'll never give up before one more try.

Reviews

[Le parisien]

Very interesting and deep ! You gave a lot of pathos to this poem but keeping it extremely sober. Your lines are very well written and full of meaning, i had to read most of them twice or three times to catch their essence, also very well done with the poem's sound and flow, especially in the last stanza :)
Great job =D

[Callista-Jade]

Inspiring, deep and stunningly beautiful. I can't help but envy how you choose your words so skillfully. One of the best love poems I've read.

[Racy Daniel]

I have written many poems about love but all those were not so good as your one, I have read many poems about love but all those poems didn't pierce in my heart, Finally when I read your poem it went through my heart and made me understand the real meaning of love. So good and marvelous work of you.

-------------^^DANIEL^^

[Tomi]

When a heart is afflicted by the seeds of love,
It spreads the disease to vein and bone;
But when love fails and sadness breaks,
The heart must shoulder it all alone.
Very sad and comforting at the same time. Thank you for sharing :) Well done!

[Starrleena Magyck]

Very inspiring...makes you learn not to give up hope....

[E. Ryan Miller]

"Though my heart may ache and my bones may break,
Though my eyes may cry and my tears run dry,
I won't give up; I won't back down;
I'll never give up before one more try."

I love that last stanza. It speaks to the reader simply and eloquently.

[Alex_Vandool]

the cure is always near....but one last try is always nearer....x

[BlueJay]

This poem has an extremely positive ending to a heartbreaking situation. I love the imagery, the emotions and the stanzas. Great work!

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is very deep and heartfelt..I really like it!.. Amazing!
Thanks for sharing..Well done :D

[the_stoic]

it's amazing that of all , the emotions pertaining to love strike the greatest of similarities .. going through this poem of yours the words 'torn to pieces' and 'one more try' reminded me of a couple of poems that i had written long back. the first stanza is a stark reality and it's been put down brilliantly.

[Kailor Mason]

Good spirit--we all need to hear these words, I think.