Killer B's

I hear a distant buzzing,
It's already begun.
Escape seems futile,
As there's nowhere to run.

I see the swarm growing,
They haven't found me yet.
Turning my back to tune them out,
Is seemingly my best bet.

I've been taken in before,
Prone to the critical judging.
But now I'm taking control,
Not swayed by their prodding and nudging.

They make sweetness from nectar,
This is their claim to fame.
But I've realized that someone's loss,
Is the price paid for their gain.

For I also have felt their stinger,
The venom stings and burns.
Steering completely out of their path,
A lesson I finally have learned.
 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Living in the south and watching the farmers move bee hives into their fields for pollenating..I find it very sad.Our peach farmers have began to cut down their trees..Our American bees are no contest for these mean little buzzers..Nice write and a really nice rythm..God bless Valentine

[Steffi]

I really like the way you personalized the bee's. I know little to nothing about bee's but after reading this i wanted to go and research them :D

[Niki Nonsense]

love it. loved the flow that it has. great job!

[~*The Writer In Me*~]

Good poem on gossip. I, too, am very tired of gossip. I just came from a town in North Dakota where it appears that no one in that town knows how to keep their word. I don't know if it was just me, but I thought that everyone liked to butt into one another's business. Your poem reminded me of that town. Keep up the good work.

[S. P. Vaporis]

nice flow and word usage. the imagery is wonderfull. buzzzzzzzzz....

[James Watts]

Very nice piece I really enjoyed this. Nice work.

[Carole]

What an incredible analogy of gossip. I LOVE it. This is very creative, Crystal. My daughter-in-law works at a dental office and has to make a conscious effort not to be "drawn in." Because of it, they are promoting her. It pays not to follow the crowd.

I've been taken in before,
Prone to the critical judging.
But now I'm taking control
Not swayed by their prodding and nudging.

It actually takes more effort not to get involved and frankly, I respect you highly for taking this stance. Kudos to you, girl! This is going into my favorites. :)

[Taja B.]

This is a interesting and good poem. It's pretty well written, and I like the Bees imagery, expressing that you were tired of the gossip, and you've overcame of what people said. Plus, I can really relate to this poem a lot.

Nice job. Thanks for sharing.:)

[Diane]

This was an interesting piece of work. There is a definite sense of rhyme, but there is something about the rhyming that possibly mirrors the irregular, frustrating sounds of the insects. Overall, it was not a calming piece of poetry, as an attack by bees is hardly a calming experience! Very observant! Diane

[KUFU]

I second that emotion! Yeah, bees have a great organization, but if you play with them long enough, eventually them little b******s will sting you! =)

[Creepy Swine Guy]

So the buzzing of the bees is a metaphor for "the buzz" that is gossip.

This is a clever piece about the ugliness that is gossip. I enjoyed it very, very much.