1=Two faces

1=Two faces

A Poem by CRZ

Get up, I'm exhausted. I'm extremely tired.
But so is this world
Sit down, You're fine.
But how about that overdue girl?

No one cares,  nobody
but then is hugs and kisses when you're known as somebody.
Only there, when you're beneficial 
they always want the best side of the stick.
But never rides when both sides aren't good
so they never stick.

So I admire the people who stuck around when
it was bad 
cause they maintained in my lane 
despite the light things I had.

But I always had one thing
PASSION.

'Cause success brings stress
therefore its the true assassin 

© 2013 CRZ



Author's Note

CRZ
The first poem I wrote ever, couple months back lol

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ok the overall point you are trying to express is solid and ever present if not borderline masterful. only issues i see here are some problems with the overall flow of the piece. I suggest a revision, not because the piece is weak in any way, but rather the opposite as it could really be a stand out and potentially down right jaw dropping. You have passion, that much is evident, now all you need are tweaks and you will have a masterpiece. Now the motif i see is the word stick/stuck which is played in different variations. This is effective but i personally feel could have been exploited for a greater effect. Nevertheless, good work

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like it, its very deep and very true great job kido

Posted 3 Years Ago


Thanks for sharing it... I enjoyed it... Great read...

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is really good. First poem ever? Nice. It's lyrical and strong. The meaning is felt. A good writer takes his reader on a journey in the emotions of the tales told or the songs sung... I was right there with you. A grimace for the fair weathers and smiling of the rocks that stood at my side. Very nice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I LIKE THIS!

The last stanza could stand on its own. However, the overall message here--I like!


Posted 3 Years Ago


It's great.I like it.Great flow.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Pretty good poem for your first attempt. Good imagery, nice word placement. Perhaps it could use a more balanced approach pacing wise, but regardless it's a solid piece. Nice work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Yup never fall for the trap of ambition and fame............. nice one

Posted 3 Years Ago


Its always nice to know what we want.

Posted 3 Years Ago



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Added on April 4, 2013
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CRZ
CRZ

New York, NY



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