1=Two faces

Get up, I'm exhausted. I'm extremely tired.

But so is this world

Sit down, You're fine.

But how about that overdue girl?

No one cares,  nobody

but then is hugs and kisses when you're known as somebody.

Only there, when you're beneficial 

they always want the best side of the stick.

But never rides when both sides aren't good

so they never stick.

So I admire the people who stuck around when

it was bad 

cause they maintained in my lane 

despite the light things I had.

But I always had one thing

PASSION.

'Cause success brings stress

therefore its the true assassin 

Author's Note

The first poem I wrote ever, couple months back lol

Reviews

[M.D Leon]

ok the overall point you are trying to express is solid and ever present if not borderline masterful. only issues i see here are some problems with the overall flow of the piece. I suggest a revision, not because the piece is weak in any way, but rather the opposite as it could really be a stand out and potentially down right jaw dropping. You have passion, that much is evident, now all you need are tweaks and you will have a masterpiece. Now the motif i see is the word stick/stuck which is played in different variations. This is effective but i personally feel could have been exploited for a greater effect. Nevertheless, good work

[David]

I like it, its very deep and very true great job kido

[Stevo The POE-t]

Thanks for sharing it... I enjoyed it... Great read...

[Lucifer Jones]

This is really good. First poem ever? Nice. It's lyrical and strong. The meaning is felt. A good writer takes his reader on a journey in the emotions of the tales told or the songs sung... I was right there with you. A grimace for the fair weathers and smiling of the rocks that stood at my side. Very nice.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I LIKE THIS!

The last stanza could stand on its own. However, the overall message here--I like!

[Bob Sherunkle]

It's great.I like it.Great flow.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Pretty good poem for your first attempt. Good imagery, nice word placement. Perhaps it could use a more balanced approach pacing wise, but regardless it's a solid piece. Nice work!

[WILDERNESS]

Yup never fall for the trap of ambition and fame............. nice one

[Dayran]

Its always nice to know what we want.