Bliss

Dimmed lights, Music Blasting. 

People screaming smoothly sounds of joy.

Pure Joy , equal. Both girl and boy.

All stress seems to go to another location

Cause at that moment, no one could hold it. 

The laughs , smile , dancing and delight.

We were all united as one for the night.

Differences seemed to not matter.

Cause matter of fact, my heart was getting fatter.

No grease though, Just peace yo.

Not to sound cliche

but 

damn that was a good day.

Reviews

[Justine]

You capture that sense of connectedness perfectly in this poem and I like "all stress seems to go to another location". Shame it had to end but that certain something that binds in commonality is the magic ingredient and once any aspect of it is gone, the whole thing becomes different. If only it could be bottled... great poem CRZ :) Justine

[Rose of many colours]

I like the sound emanating from this piece..Thanks for sharing

[Eddie Davis]

Very nice, a good upbeat feel to it. Those are the times you remember. Good job.

[Calibaster]

I totally agree, ... I have had days like that, and I have usually found that they pertain to my attitude at the time. :) Nice job! ;)

[MsJewel]

I love the uplifting feel to this clever poem. I smiled the whole time reading. Thank you for sharing this gem!
:) Julie

[h d e rushin]

nice, nice, nice word play...nicely written

dana

[Anna Blackburn]

Very entertaining.. Wonderful rhymes. Some suggestions, though: you should put 'Cause instead so that everyone knows it's meaning because. Also, you might put a semi-colon after smoothly, jut to make it flow more...smoothly.. ;)

[wordman]

sounds like you smoked to much weed lol I guess people still smoke

[Lyn Anderson]

I really like this poem. It has great style. If you are looking for opinion on tweaking it - if you are not stuck on the second Joy or Cause it would flow better without them. Either way it is a nice piece.

[TPK Stories]

An interesting way to describe the word!