Bliss

Bliss

A Poem by CRZ

Dimmed lights, Music Blasting. 
People screaming smoothly sounds of joy.
Pure Joy , equal. Both girl and boy.

All stress seems to go to another location
Cause at that moment, no one could hold it. 
The laughs , smile , dancing and delight.
We were all united as one for the night.

Differences seemed to not matter.
Cause matter of fact, my heart was getting fatter.
No grease though, Just peace yo.

Not to sound cliche
but 
damn that was a good day.

© 2013 CRZ



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I like the funky and fun vibe you fuse into this one. It really drives home the feeling that it was a good day.

Posted 4 Years Ago


good darn beat to this...
like the read of the words
love your ending...
and don't stop until ur family is rich!!!
thank you for sharing

Posted 4 Years Ago


Natural beat to this poem which is nice. I wouldn't capitalize "Music" and "Blasting." Use a different words than "smoothly" in the second line, just sounds strange in that context. "equal. Both girl and boy." I liked that.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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CRZ
CRZ

New York, NY



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