Too Late

Too Late

A Poem by CRZ

Hey. You seem happy today, I'm glad you're feeling'
the feeling of peace. 
I need a piece of your mind for a minute.
My soul is happy and since your happy, I'm hoping you can put some in it.
Hey. I guess you don't hear me, I'm friendly no need to fear me.

Hey what's up, are you sad? are you feeling down?

I'm here if you need a ear or maybe two
I've been here for you for about two years.
You never pay me attention, I guess is because 
you're sad and you don't want anybody bothering
you or is it just me. I'm here but I need to jut breathe

yooooo, are you mad today ? you looked heated?
You need help with anything? I have your back if anything
hello? Can't understand my words. This silence isn't cute
I know you're mad or whatever but don't put this voice on mute.
okay, whatever. I know this can't last forever. I'll sever who ever
but then again who am I to you?

Today, I am just walking. Walking with no particular location
I started walking and I heard someone screaming from behind me

sounded like it was saying " Jello , Mellow , Fellow or Yellow"
I don't know it was something like that, oh well.
It was too late.

© 2013 CRZ

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Dear CRZ,

How are you today? I saw this poem in my news feed and the title caught my eye because I surely can identify with that title. I must point out that in the first stanza, third line, change "your" to "you're." I'm supposing in same line, the word "some," refers to the peace the narrator is talking to. This line right here seems loose, "I'm friendly no need to fear me." I feel like that stanza can do without it, but that's my opinion. Overall, this stanza to me reminds me of a poisonous relationship in where there's so much giving, very little receiving.

In the third stanza, in the first line, change "a" to "an." In the third line of that stanza, remove the word, "is," as it is idly there. The last line, change "jut" to "just." The second stanza reminds me of someone being invisible and imprisoned by another's emotional episodes.

This line was a tad awkward, "you looked heated." This is awkward too, "don't put this voice on mute." There's no structure rhyme scheme from the beginning so no need to make anything rhyme now.

Anywho, the feeling is definitely something one can relate to trying to help someone, but not being able to. I liked the meaning and indeed was a good read.

Sincerely JazzSoulKeke,

God bless

Posted 4 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tionge Rosalie Johnson

4 Years Ago

I have to say your feedback was the best I've read on here. So, I'm going to have to agree with what.. read more


I really enjoyed it. I don't usually read much poetry but I liked the way this one made me feel what the narrator was feeling. Very good.

Posted 5 Years Ago

When you ask a girl, "What's wrong ?" and she replies, "Nothing."
That is a danger sign and you need to run far FAR away ! :D

Posted 5 Years Ago

I enjoyed Jason...I like the way you narrate...I can feel the frustration in the situation...nicely done...Rose

Posted 5 Years Ago

Jason, I think that since you have written quite a few poems lately you should concider coralating them and put them into a book format. Send them to some publishers who accept unsolicited work (Google them) who knows where it may lead. Look to some of the companies who promote the rapper style you aspire to.
Keep well-your biggest fan.

Posted 5 Years Ago

Nicely penned thoughts. Found some expressions very appealing-''if you need a ear or maybe two'' and "don't put this voice on mute''Good job Jason

Posted 5 Years Ago

Nice flow.

Posted 5 Years Ago

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Added on June 20, 2013
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