aware

I’m awake,

                                I vision a lotta projects

                                Filled with prospects

                                But benzes and Gucci lenses

                                Blur their optics

 

Starve your heart

Feed their pockets

 

                           Words flying fiercely from the subconscious

                           Briefly bringing back a new breed

                           Tired of this monotonous

                               

                           People, money, bullshit

                           We all equal, but is funny

                           We’re ashamed of the flag white            

                           Your man got killed but you doing his wife

                           I guess it isn’t that bad, right?

 

                           All these “masters”

                           Looking like experimental hamsters

                           Chasing for the wheel to stop

                           When will humans stop...?

                                      To kneel to pop. 

Author's Note

Raw intake, not cooked. The truth isn't medium rare

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

I like hard, critical voices, poetry should not be `nice`or `lovely`, but tell the truth, good write

[DIVYA]

Some stark truths neatly told.

[Angel]

I agree with Renee...I think I'd rather hear this done aloud than read it...

[Renée]

Have you ever done readings ? Or thought about adding your own recording here? I think rap is best by listening with the ears than reading… but that is a personal preference..

[Poetic Beauty]

People get lost chasing the all mighty dollar sometimes and lose the real value in life. While it is important to find financial stability; becoming money hungry isn't a great way to spend ones life for we wash away the things that are important.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is really good, strong format, good structure for the subject matter. You're should be your, I believe.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Catchy really, it displays a powerful mind and a willing spirit, well done, good read.

[Penny]

Looks raw but not at all bad. As you said its like a rap and the fact that it talks about so many different things does not make it look awkward rather makes it meandering. Well done, you can experiment with the style and probably you'll come with an even better 'rap in poetry'