Away In Summer

Away In Summer

A Poem by Stonz P.




sun burns above you

somewhere wells evaporate

and rain over me




© 2018 Stonz P.



Author's Note

Stonz P.
Syllable Count: 17
Syllable Form: 5-7-5

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I always believe that in poetry less is more...the less you try to dictate the reader's imagination, the more meaning he can extract...first off the way you wrote it appeals to the senses and incites curiosity....I can find many interpretations to this, but I would share only one...I got a feeling that this could be taken as a metaphor for world poverty...the way the sun of troubles is always high up in the skies for the underprivileged, and how their troubles and their hardwork pays off for the rich...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stonz P.

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading, Moon's fairest daughter... appreciate your insights.



Reviews

Like it. Short. Powerful. Meaningful. Welling of natural elements.

Posted 1 Month Ago


I always believe that in poetry less is more...the less you try to dictate the reader's imagination, the more meaning he can extract...first off the way you wrote it appeals to the senses and incites curiosity....I can find many interpretations to this, but I would share only one...I got a feeling that this could be taken as a metaphor for world poverty...the way the sun of troubles is always high up in the skies for the underprivileged, and how their troubles and their hardwork pays off for the rich...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stonz P.

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading, Moon's fairest daughter... appreciate your insights.
such a well done senryu...

i like the middle line...somewhere...and yet...the raining then is a good thing...

i get the positives of this rain...it is love---

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stonz P.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words, Jacob.

I re-analysed the poem when I read your comment.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Years Ago

it's close, as far as which one...there is nature here....but haiku is strictly nature...and senryu .. read more
Stonz P.

2 Years Ago

Then so be it, I shall remove the inconclusive label. The poem's more essential.
Thank you.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

126 Views
4 Reviews
Added on April 15, 2016
Last Updated on May 21, 2018

Author

Stonz P.
Stonz P.

Lakhnau, India



About
Must you even try to know a soul that has nothing to confide even if you deny it the right to be a fly be free free from your questioning eyes expecting cries when the soul is nothing but a .. more..

Writing
The Choice The Choice

A Poem by Stonz P.