Ten things about You

I know this may sounds strange

Love your lips

as you kiss me

Love your eyes

as you gaze in my eyes

Love your hands

as you pat on me

Love your cheeks

as you greet me

Love your hair

as it brush on my face

Love my luck

to meet you

Love my heart

which was taken by you

Love this park

where we met

Love this bridge

where you said I love you

Love you

my lover

my everything

Author's Note

Every poem especially this one is fake, so the feeling might be stange or anything bad, please don't mind... I wrote this by imagination, so forgive me.

Reviews

[Dalebear]

This it a sweet loving poem very nice. Thanks for sharing it

Keep up writing

[Inkfathom]

Awww! It's so heart felt!! I can really feel your connection with whom you're writing to as if it were real. Does that make sense?

[Roxi L]

Good job, I knew that this was fake from the start...Cause i always read the comments first :)) Anyway great job but there are some errors in there that really stand out. There was some parts that I could feel the fake... Anyway good job.
Roxi

[Jami Nicole]

I really liked this poem. I could feel all the emotion of it, but at the same time I could feel the fakeness. Keep up the good writing. :)

Love, Jami

[M.A. Van Dyke]

I agree! Good job!

[Innocent Killer]

Im in love with this Poem, It's so full of emotion lol. It's very good and I like that even though this is Fiction. Made up, It seems to be real and All. I very much enjoyed reading this :D

[emmajoy]

This might be fiction but your imagination really is strong and fluent. There are small mistakes here and there, but they don't hide your perception of what love is - in fact they add spoonfuls of charm to your poem.

[~Lizzy♬]

OMG! Girl, these are fake! I never even knew that because, just as Vicky said, you have been able to cover up 80% of your emotions that are needed in a poem like this. You have a great talent. I am glad I get to read these. Maybe you just need a little bit more vocabulary. Other than that, you are a great writer and pleased to be a friend of yours.

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

Well, if it's a work of fiction, you've been able to cover eighty percent of the emotions that are needed for a poem like this. I just need to tell you that there are some grammatical errors here and there, so just read through it again and again and you'll get it. It's pretty easy to catch too. I love the repetition going on. Good job!
-Yin

[Courtney]

I love how you formatted this.
Well done, my friend!