My Heart

My heart

a mess

full with feelings

sad

happy

confusing

all happening to me

sad of being laugh at

happy to have  friends

confuse about  everything

sadness is a pain

happiness is a joy

confusion is a mess

sadness more

happiness less

sad occupies my days

only friends

cheer me up

I lost the track of life

so sad

too sad

hope you won't laugh

cause that's the fact

deep in my heart

please

don't hurt me

forever since

Author's Note

That's truly what's happpening, and I haven't tell anyone, but I tell you by poems. I have no one to tell, but through poems, I don't mind.

Reviews

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

OK, there are some errors (mostly grammatical) here and there. I'll point them out to you:
1) all happens on me ---> all happening to me (happens on me, doesn't sound right)
sad of being laugh ---> sad of being laughed at
happy of having friends ---> happy to have friends
confuse on everything ---> confused about everything

2)sad is a pain --> it should be sadness
happy is a joy ---> happiness
confuse is a mess ---> confusion

3) there are other places where this was missed out, like it should be sadness occupies, I don't know the correct grammatical terms, but when you read it, you get the feeling that it is wrong.

4) Only friends cheer me up. when you add cheers, it means something singular cheering you up.

Other than that, the fact that you are expressing your feelings in this poem means a lot, it must hurt to be laughed at, and to know that happiness < sadness (mathematical logic lol). I like how you've been able to express the feelings of sadness, happiness and confusion in it, and in the end, there is a slight dash of hope. Good job for that. Keep writing!
-Yin

[Aven]

poetry is a beautiful conduit to the soul, a fantastic way to open up and express oneself, this is a perfect example of that. a very heartfelt and honest poem, well written!

[Dalebear]

This was a sad but beautiful poem

[Kimberly]

Apart from errors already pointed out this was a very good emotional poem.

[BLACKCRUSH]

I know your heart was suffering when you wrote this. It's true that sometimes only our friends can bring a smile to us when we are so unhappy. You did a wonderful job , this poem was from you heart.

[Wondering Mind]

A sad piece of a poem. The heart beats between sorrow and joy.

[thatbryngirl]

Great write! exactly what I've always been thinkin...

[Rhonda]

this was an awesome poem

[Sweets]

Great poem.
"sadness is a pain
happiness is a joy
confusion is a mess"
You really expressed your feelings in here.
Great write :D

[Gheeneil]

Happiness is half-felt without pain and sadness. The contrast creates the excitement and surprises. This is such a strongly emotional and realistic piece of writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes easy to fall into sadness. Must do your best to escape or world may leave you behind. A very sad poem. When are heart broke. Friends can't really do a lot. Time is the healer. A powerful poem. Thank you.
Coyote