Where Have You Been?

Where Have You Been?

A Poem by Cynthia
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Underneath, there's great sorrow

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Where have you been?
The same place I went to?
Hiding in the shadows?
Deepen in the sorrow?

I'd once thought there's a spark,
 underneath my mask,
but there is nothing,
except the heart broken sound.

I'd once thought of love,
but that is decades before,
before bleeding and dying,
and left with a silent sob.

Maybe moments after,
the memories will be erased,
but after all people died,
then that is the end

written in: 29-4-11, 7:39 a.m.

© 2011 Cynthia



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Cynthia
I'm having a struggle with poems...

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Death should be though of as a rebirth since the soul is always carried on. I enjoyed your poem very much, I could feel your expression while reading it and I liked the lines:
I'd once thought there's a spark,
underneath my mask,
but there is nothing,
except the heart broken sound

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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nice poem

Posted 6 Years Ago


I agree 100% with what Valentine commented below. One must get used to mental and memories' management!

Posted 6 Years Ago


i love the poem


Posted 6 Years Ago


Soul is round like a pearl , and the sorrowful stripes remind me of marble balls , I see this vision , them rolling under antique furniture . . . words find their way in some environment , and oh ! the sensations touch , tickle , tease . . . verbs fly in the horizon , hands pick something , and the eyes are like . . . sandy beaches , and a pearl in a shell

Posted 6 Years Ago


Awesome write, I love the way you penned your emotions.
:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is a very powerful piece with such melancholy diction! Great write! I also think that this would make a lovely song. :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


Memories are one gift from God that death cannot destroy..Bitter memories have rto be replaced by sweet ones or you die on the inside, believe me I know,,Valentine

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

poem tip: break your heart and let the words floe natuarally like blood from a wound.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You write with such a depth.. our persona.. who we are on the outside as opposed to the real self. As to your comment, just let your thoughts and feelings flow.. like this. You're doing better than fine...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is quite an expressive piece of writing, quite emo but that's not a bad thing. I enjoy reading and writing about the darker aspects of human emotions. You should not shy away from writing in this manner, just don't dig too deep too soon.
Keep it natural.
The flow of the above is well paced and for someone as young as you this is a grand piece.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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