A Poem by Ben Taylor

The withered leaf flees
Bourne aloft by plumes of smoke
Its brethren consumed

© 2011 Ben Taylor

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Seeing what, to most, is not there; giving meaning to seemingly trivial events. Humanizing the inhuman.
As in quantum theory, the observer has altered the observed.

Posted 7 Years Ago

i have a hard time with senryu, they are easy to write, but it is not easy to convey an emotion with such small space...nice job

Posted 7 Years Ago

Oh! they're supposed to be independent of the title? I've always loved reading ones that were indiscernible without the title; they make better use of the available syllables, in my opinion. I need to read up on haiku I suppose.

Yeah, I guess most Haiku don't even have titles. Crapit. My other 3 are inadequate. Anyways, thanks for that though :)
I now know.

Posted 7 Years Ago

A lovely clear visual image... and i like the deeper meaning suggested by brethren. Also, this one works independently of its title, as they are supposed to... i never quite manage that; mine lean heavily on the extra words in the title.

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice visual :) Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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Added on March 24, 2011
Last Updated on March 24, 2011
Tags: fire, leaf, autumn


Ben Taylor
Ben Taylor

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