True self

She sits there, just sits there

in the still of the night

Silence fills her ears

darkness covers her eyes

and a lock covers her heart

She feels alone

has been for years

 

Her issue is not being shy

But fear to let others in

For she knows that she is fragile

and her confidence easily dimmed

 

She wants to believe her friendships are true

but knows her friends could care less

she still puts on a smile

and laughs for a while

 

watching everyone fall in love

and wishing she could too

dreaming of a knight in shinning armor

who will never come true

 

In the end,

sjhe acts like nothing is wrong

hidding

masking

her true self

Author's Note

plz let me know any ways i can make it better
(yes, this is written about me)
<3 Kaddy

Reviews

[Ceilidh Hamm]

this poem is great and i know how you feel

[Eli Jarman]

She sits there, just sits there
in the still of the night
Silence fills her ears
darkness covers her eyes
and a lock covers her heart
She feels alone
has been for years



My favorite line, nice work

[Jan]

Kadessa, your knight in shinning armor will come one day and all your friends will be there to support you, love you, and care for you. Our friendship is true, don't forget that, alright baby girl?

[Kadessa (Kaddy)]

Ok, hey, text me, I am free this afternoon and wanna hang out

[Jan]

Okay hold on my phone died so I have to find my charger and if I can then lets get Rebecca and Megan to hang out too

[Kadessa (Kaddy)]

Okay, I also got 1Ds new red nose day single

[Jan]

Sweet!!!

[The Nude Writer]

I think it's great :) you are quite tallented :)

[Acer]

lovely poem, well written indeed, loved here few lines...

watching everyone fall in love
and wishing she could too
dreaming of a knight in shinning armor
who will never come true.......

depthness was seeing indeed in your words. Nice piece, the idea for this writing was really good.

[RachelReaper]

the only critique I have is to change "sjke" to "she". But this was a good read, people could relate to it.

[PurpleQuartz]

This poem is really sweet. I think it's meaningful and I think someway or another people can relate to it.

Great writing.
-PurpleQuartz

[Sami Khalil]

watching everyone fall in love...
masking her true self...
Nice write.

[Kadessa (Kaddy)]

Thx

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...

[Brittany DeFranco]

fix "she" in the 4th to last line, other than that, it's perfect. I think you should let other people in either way, because when I did, I got seriously hurt, we must experience that to know how to make it better, and you know what? I found the love of my life that way. ^_^
100/100

[Alex]

This is very powerful and deep. make you really think about yourself and other people. well done!