Sea Foam Skies

A poem about eyes, and what they see... or what they choose not to see...

Sea Foam Skies

 

 

Your eyes,

 

The color of sea foam and sky.

 

Pulling me,

 

Like the tides into the unknown.

 

They're hypnotizing,

 

A beautiful pool of blue.

 

And, they left a fear in me --

 

A constant stream of insecurities.

 

Yet, I couldn't stir away.

 

They held me captivated;

 

Wondering what words they were holding back,

 

And, what do they see, when they look back?

 

The same, troubled girl I try to hide?

 

The effects of nightly visions, or the scars upon my skin?

 

Or do they see more?

 

Can they see the timid smile I try to leave,

 

Or the longing in my daze?

 

Do they see me wanting you?

 

Do they see me at all?

 

Or am I truly losing myself?

 

Has my grip on reality faded,

 

Lost in the crystal skies?

 

Your eyes are to blame.

 

They've left me here,

 

Helpless to my drifting mind.

 

Ever wanting to see the beautiful color of sea foam skies.

Author's Note

I've had a lot of inspiration to write lately. However, I've got a desperate desire for critique. If you've bothered to read my work, please... please, take the time to leave me with your thoughts? It will be much appreciated.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Very inspiring

[zain]

I like the feeling I got while I was reading it. Beautiful write!

[closed..acct]

This is a beuatiful write, I really enjoyed this.

[Aarontastic]

I like this poem; it's quite good :) The title is absolutely beautiful, and it's a great comparison for the admired guy's eyes. I liked the concept of the poem too--how to guess at what a person truly feels and thinks when they look at you? It can make a person awfully insecure to be stared at, even if the person has a pleasant look on their face.

Although no line stands out in itself because of their brevity, taken as a whole they go nicely together. Good job imo.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. The eyes can open doors to desire. Beautiful and hopeful eyes can make you smile and know happiness. I like the story and the powerful description in the poem. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote