Circle of Guilt

Circle of Guilt

A Poem by Hebe
"

..... when the mind breaks down

"

Left in a circle

muddling to find a path

the satellite watches me rip out the grass

knuckles bleeding, digging deeper into the abyss

did you ask me a question?

HEY YOU OVER THERE, DID YOU ASK ME A QUESTION?

I must look a little frenzied

perhaps a little delirious

I want to be invisible to my pain

my mind, yes... once I had a mind

now a mass of burnt live wires

smell the smoldering of my intelligence

it's melting away in the scorching heat

once I held the reigns, I sat in my chariot

thought I was God

my jaw held rigid so not to allow words of sentiment to seep through

but life is no dunce .... 

am I still in the circle?

don't want to find a way out!

my fingers tearing uncontrollably at my wretched clothes

to spill the venom from my pores

my tears flooding my throat, my screams can be heard beyond the blue moon

don't know anything anymore

leave me rot in this circle

cover my body with rocks

let the dirt regenerate me into fresh green grass

that just sways gently in the breeze and feels lush to the touch of a gentler soul









© 2017 Hebe



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What a poetic mind you have! Great !!!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Hebe

1 Month Ago

Thank you Joel, appreciate your review:)
Oooh! Very emotional piece.

I am feeling these words very much indeed at the moment, as well testified to in my latest poem.

You have described the manic feelings of anxiety very well throughout. And your ending plea is full of pain and helpless longing; take the pain away and make me as peaceful as swaying grass in the wind.

Enjoyed it very much, Hebe. Very emotive and with an essence of manic power. Nicely done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Hebe

4 Months Ago

You described it perfectly ...thank you for your wonderful comments
Loved your poem, Hebe.....
Keep writing:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Hebe

6 Months Ago

Hi Naat, thank you appreciate it :)
Neetha

6 Months Ago

My pleasure...
So true... thank you so much :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe, that deep yearning of the soul is what lays the path for generations through poetry. Loved every bit of your writing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

6 Months Ago

Sorry for answering late.... thank you so much for your words :)
' my tears flooding my throat, my screams can be heard beyond the blue moon ~ ~ ~ don't know anything anymore .. '

Your pain screams out in virtually every line! Dear Lord, that anyone could suffer so... and yet, yet, pen those feelings in such a raw, gasping moving way'; trying to hold back, almost not.. almost are.. like a metronome of life in hell. Will remember this work.. is so extraordinarily visual even though brilliantly tragic.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

8 Months Ago

I was really moved by your review... you have the capability to seeing depth. Thank you Emma :)
What can I say about this one? I know: WOW I LOVED IT!! Your use of words always leaves me speechless. I seriously don't know what else to say. So i'm gonna stop typing because i might start rambling at any moment and you're gonna get bored and i don't want that but seriously your writing is like amazing and i love it and i said that already didn't i? Sorry Hebe... I sometimes ramble. I said that already too didn't I? ok i'll stop typing now :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

8 Months Ago

Lol...thanks Tashida, always love your ramblings:)
Tashida

8 Months Ago

Lol i'm glad
wow your imagination power is just superb really loved your writings

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

8 Months Ago

Hi Tanya.. thank you for reading, appreciate your review :)
very disturbing. the torment of the soul. such strong, dark imagery. beautifully written though. outstanding. you've captured the emotion so well, perhaps too well. so many great lines. 'my jaw held rigid so not to allow words of sentiment seep threw' - tripped me up a bit, i think you want 'to seep through' rather than 'seep threw'. i like how you stop everything and ask the question. very effective and clever. you're something else Hebe! great job my friend.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

8 Months Ago

Thank you Pete.... a slip of the pen, thanks for pointing it out.... so happy you liked it :)
Pete

8 Months Ago

awesome write Hebe. powerful!
Hebe

8 Months Ago

Your the best :)
You have beautifully penned the the agony of a soul in great pain and turmoil. The call of soul Wishing for being regenerated into something beautiful to be felt by a gentle soul !
Very well expressed mental breakdown! There were situations where I myself felt like this.
Kudos to this write and you, Hebe. Thank you for sharing..

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hebe

8 Months Ago

Hi Bala, thank you my friend for your heart felt words. So sorry to hear of your agony... we all go.. read more

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