Miserere

Suicide looms in the residue
of steel parts,
may it uncoil the tethered barrel
of my heart.

The must of mortem lies
in the chamber dark.
"This magazine sings for thou";
I hark.

A ripe mirage
taunts me at the pew.
By god I do nothing
and by Nothing I'm new.

O, skin peeled back,
flesh of a fruit free to rot.
O, instinct interred,
ferments and molds the end sought.

I'd put on the safety for this plan
that I forge,
but all ends in enmity for the self
that I gorge.

Minus the garnish of honour,
I digest the harakiri.
O, if only this modern meal
were a mere miserere.

Here is the magic of malaise
which fires a spell of swarming flies.
It summons the nausea
which plots the road where pathos dies.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when we can no longer relate to others, and then especially ourselves...a part of us dies...
this reminds me of some of the beats who left us through suicide...like sexton said "it waits in the cupboard"

almost as inevitable as having a can of chicken noodle soup (comfort food) that we will open sooner or later.

you are so good, my friend....your writing inspires me.

j.

[Dalton]

I'm highly complimented that it reminds you of the beats.
Moreover, I'm absolutely humbled by your assertion that my writing inspires you. Your work inspires me, my friend. You're brilliant Jacob.
May both of us keep that can locked in the cupboard.
Salute,
Dalton

[Jonas]

Finally, a traditional poem that combines excellent flow and rhyme to give that sing-song reading satisfaction. Where did these go in the past years?

Well done.

[Dalton]

Thank you kindly for your review. I believe the "pop poets" have largely destroyed many styles and their appeal.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

"A ripe mirage
taunts me at the pew.
By god I do nothing
and by Nothing I'm new."

This stanza literally jumped off the screen for me. The entirety of the poem is brilliant! The first stanza is a strong visual representation of the bleakness of suicidal thoughts. I couldn't help but think of Robin Williams, wondering what went through his mind beforehand. I don't know if there's any sadder tragedy than a life ended too soon for want of ending the pain.

[Dalton]

I'm smiling now after reading your review. Your many insights are certainly appreciated.
Indeed, the passing of Robin Williams was terribly sad.
Thank you for your blessing.
Salute,
D

[Dead]

This is really good :) Kinda dark but really good.

[Dalton]

Thank you for your interest, and words.
Dalton

[Stefano Segnan]

Hello to you! I find this to be a skillful poem: the illustration of the idea is very good, the structure you employed adds a lot to musicality. I also read your poem Decadence Deep and I found it interesting as well, but this one has somehow more melody in it. The dark atmosphere in both poems are quite expressive. I really enjoyed reading them, great work! (:

[Dalton]

Thank you for your words Stefano. I'm glad you too noticed this musicality, as it was unintentionally written with this feature.
Salute,
Dalton