Ragged Masts and the Shore

A point of clarity-
nobility vs. asperity-
indeed, there is a fin you lose
in love perished. Lo, you choose
to dwell in that howling hook-point injury
or
rise from the water pyre without thine incendiary.

Alack, roosting with rancour
only rusts sanity's anchor.
Woe, I know there will forever and always be
those who, only by sailing into oblivion, feel free.

If you manage to make it by the blanched shore
(even if your ship's destroyed evermore),
remember your waves, and that leviathan
who tried, by tentacle, to take you within.
Recall those heavy harpoons that you thrusted
unto the heart of thy beast (thee once trusted).

Behold- at rock bottom, one soaked stone:
your pretend pillow, thy coral covers unknown-
you did not drown
in the basin of thy behemoth's berth;
O, you may know,
all that matters is secco self-worth.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if you can survive an angry sea...and all its inhabitants...you can survive life itself with all its obstacles and dangerous people...

i like the analogy drawn here...the rhythm and alliteration...like the sea waves washing upon the shore of the mind.

[Dalton]

Thanks Jacob for your review. I resonate with all that you've said.
As always, I appreciate your ideas, and literary explanation.
Grateful,
D

[Stefano Segnan]

Hello there, haven't seen you around for a while.
I am just puzzled as to why such a structure, doesn't really seem to fit the style you employed especially if you take rhythmics and archaisms into consideration. Note, this is not an issue, I am just being curious. I really enjoyed the poem, second and last stanza in particular. Nice job!

[Dalton]

Stefano, nice to hear from you sir!
Yes, all of what you've mentioned is accurate. I wasn't fully aware of these points, until you mentioned them. The only writer I consistently read, is Nietzsche, and so I believe that my mind is flooded with archaisms. In this piece, they've surfaced, if not for a single instance.
Thank you kindly,
D