Welcome to Wonderland

A be careful what you wish for poem with an Alice in Wonderland theme. Enjoy!

Welcome to Wonderland

Little girl, you dare to harvest hate for us

After we picked you out of the rubble and dust

And the decrepit remnants of a life shunned by love

Don't you worry, you will get what you want

The mad hatter will follow you to the grave

You want to hear silence scream, have it your way

Welcome to Wonderland Alice, your damnation

The utopia you wanted to be more than a notion

Now take a good look through the mirror's eyes

At the place you thought would be paradise

For so long old oaks have danced in the zephyrs

But never changing was your dream desire

For an oasis born in the flames of tranquility

Tell us, is it everything you thought it would be?

The mad hatter will follow you to the grave

The rabbit has showed you how wrong you were a second too late

And now this is your fate

Welcome to Wonderland Alice, your damnation

The utopia you wanted to be more than a notion

Now take a good look through the mirror's eyes

At the place you thought would be paradise

You're left with a teacup that will never fill

Until the day your breath grows still

A wishing well won't save you now, a shooting star won't hear you out

I hope that you are happy now, wearing your fool's gold crown

Welcome to Wonderland Alice, your damnation

The utopia you wanted to be more than a notion

Now take a good look through the mirror's eyes

At the place you thought would be paradise

You're left with a teacup that will never fill

Until the day your breath grows still

Author's Note

I really really enjoyed writing this one.

Reviews

[Sunspot]

I read this out loud for my english class today because it was themed around "Alice in Wonderland" and they loved it :)

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm really hapy to hear that you're English class enjoyed this. I hope you got a good grade on that assignment. Thanks for reviewing :)

[Sunspot]

Yeah, my English teacher said that everyone in the class probably would love a copy of the poem :) I've been training myself to be a voice actor and so the rhythm of the poem really helped with the inflections that I needed to project. I hope I conveyed your point accurately enough. By the way, I know that the person that this is directed towards is Alice, but who is the speaker? And what compelled you to write this poem? Is there an allegory here that I'm not seeing, or a hidden meaning? It would just be really interesting to know :)

[Amber Lily]

I really like the last two lines! There's a lot of inspiration you can draw from Alice's story and I like the direction you went with in this, well done! :)

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

your hook, your premise:

Welcome to Wonderland Alice, your damnation
The utopia you wanted to be more than a notion
Now take a good look through the mirror's eyes
At the place you thought would be paradise

worked very well and the supporting stanzas that were used to support were worked in nicely....very good job....

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the detailed review! I appreciate the feedback :)

[A Scribbler Named Bek]

I'm a sucker for anything that has to do with Wonderland, so of course I loved this. It was way more chilling and macabre than I thought it would be, but really, when you think about it, an eternal Wonderland might be more of a curse than it would be a blessing. Too much of a good thing and all that.

[DoormanDan]

Yeah, I could be more of a curse than a blessing. Thanks for reviewing :)

[A Scribbler Named Bek]

The typo in your reply just made my night! I needed some laughs after today. In the future I'll remember that you can be more of a curse than a blessing ;)

[DoormanDan]

I just noticed it lol :)

[Katie]

I love this poem !It is wonderful! :)

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you like it. I appreciate the review :)

[Valentine]

You are really growing, I like your word usage in this one. Valentine

[DoormanDan]

Thanks, I really like the word zephyr, it just has something to it....:)

[Cool Girl]

I really liked this one!
I love when you use references to fairy tales:)
This was really great!

[DoormanDan]

I absolutely love fairy tales, so writing these kind of poems is fun for me( my all time favorite fairy tale is Little Red Riding Hood) :)

[Cool Girl]

Yes, apparently that fairy tale is a big metaphor:)

[Lizardo]

I really really enjoyed reading this one xD
Another wonderful piece Dan, (your probably tired of hearing this xD) You are a great talented writer
Wonderful piece

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for checking this one out Lizardo! :)

[Tasfia Islam]

and i enjoyed reading this.....great work... :)

[Duaa]

amazing really !!! you did great here

[DoormanDan]

Thank you for the knd words!