One Minute (On Hiatus)

A Book by DoormanDan

The story of a young man who has only one minute to break free of the fear that holds him down

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© 2015 DoormanDan

Author's Note

Right now, this story is more of an idea than an actual story. I know what I want to write, but I just can't seem to think of the words right now. I have every intention of continuing this story, but it may take a while for me to get started. Anyway, as usual, tell me what you think! :)

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Cruz Niq

My only critique: there isn't enough.
There are a few grammar mistakes, but it flows nicely. Reminds me of the Twilight Zone narratives.

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

Yeah, the prologue is a bit short, but that's because I haven't mapped the whole story out in my hea.. read more

Valentine

How thick is that shell that you find yourself bound in? This could be a very interesting write if you decide to finish it. With age some of us are bound in tighter cocoons. Your growing will better define breaking out of that hold youth has on you. Kathie

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

Those are true words indeed. Thanks for taking the time to review this. I have every intention of .. read more

Stephen

I really liked this introduction and I am excited to hear the actual story that you come up with. Just two grammar errors I noticed my friend. You miss spelled two words, no big deal. First sentence: "We go through a process exactly lie the one those fantastic little creatures go through." exactly lie should be exactly like, I think. Second sentence: "In order to help any of your who are afraid of the world of which you live in, let me tell you the story of a young man who transcended his fears and broke out of his cocoon..." your who are afraid should be you who are afraid. Great introduction

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

Thanks for pointing out those errors. My keyboard can be unresponsive at times without me even noti.. read more

9 Years Ago

No problem, anything to make a fellow writers work greater. I would expect you to do the same for me.. read more

Cool Girl

Dan, YOU MUST CONTINUE THIS STORY!!!! I LOVE the prologue :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

haha, I'm glad you like it so far CG. I really want to continue this story, so I promise I will. I.. read more

9 Years Ago

lol xD Okay, cool!

Lizardo

KEEP It GOING!! xD
I'm thirlled to read more of this story!!
It's really good dan, One nice prologue
Really keeps the readers at the edge of their sits
I'll surely read this story, Keep it coming Dan!

Posted 9 Years Ago

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9 Years Ago

Thanks for the offer :). You're writing a book too? what's it about? :)

9 Years Ago

Why not go see it for yourself? :) I already go it up! It would kind of hard to explain because I'm .. read more

9 Years Ago

Alright, I'll check it out :)

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Added on January 18, 2015
Last Updated on March 6, 2015
Tags: Break Out of Your Cocoon

Author

DoormanDan

College Burnout, DE

About

I'm a twenty one year old young man who enjoys writing poetry, songs, stories, paintball and other things. My favorite things to do are parkour, video games, listening to music, and making people hap.. more..