Sonata of Your Afterglow

Sometimes, even the most gifted of individuals can go their entire lives without seeing what they've got

Sonata of Your Afterglow

Your fingers are crayons, but you are color-blind

Your insecurities you just can't leave behind

But even as your mind asphyxiates

In the vexation your effort creates

The art you make you don't appreciate

You never give yourself a chance to rest

And your building your own concrete casket

Put down that creative cigarette

Put in your favorite cassette

And play the Sonata of Your Afterglow

Your true worth you've already shown

Malaise in your veins ensnares you in self-dispraise

Staining with shame your psychogenic polonaise

You stare at all the macabre monuments

And question if your actions were prudent

Incarcerated in Resent's basement

You never tell yourself you tried your best

To save all from the mires of apocalypse

But thanks to you, we still have a path

To walk on in the aftermath

So play the Sonata of Your Afterglow

In the end you are a hero

The sturdiest soul is the one that knows

Perfection is a plant that it can't grow

No matter how many seeds that it sows

So let yourself let go of your sorrow

Demons that are bred from the womb of Zest

Are often the most demented and grotesque

So fill up your glass with Luna's light

And shower in the ambernight

This is the Sonata of Your Afterglow

Telling you that you're beautiful

Author's Note

How the Heck I managed to write this piece during the college madness without my grades plummeting I do not know, but I'm glad I did. On a creative level, I pull out all the stops for this one, and am overall very happy with the final result (the last six lines are some of my proudest moments as of right now, as I feel I really created some strong, symbolic imagery there. By the way, don't feel bad if you haven't heard of ambernight before, because I just invented that word, using night and the symbolic meaning of the color amber that I came across. That's all I tell you there, the meaning itself is something you'll have to figure out on your own). My Dad told me that he thinks this is one of my best pieces, so I'm super excited to share this one with you all! As usual, tell me what you think, and let me ask a question before I go; what do you think of my revamped style? It's not much different than before, but I am trying to paint more vivid pictures now. Please feel free to be honest, and I'll see you all next time! :)

Reviews

[Sam]

I definitely enjoyed reading your poem! You did a good job conveying meaning while keeping the rhythm and flow. As for the content I liked how you described the hidden struggles each person goes through, and how quick we are to criticize ourselves. I really liked it!

[DoormanDan]

I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed reading this. Thank you for the review! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

This is poetry my friend. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to perfect ending. You create a enjoyable and worthwhile poem to read. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[DoormanDan]

Well, I'm very happy that you enjoyed reading this piece, Coyote! I really appreciate, and am flattered by, your praise! Thanks for reading. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[zaisham9393]

It's true. This is one of your best pieces; it reflects our inner struggles, tendency to diminish our accomplishments, having unrealistic expectations, aiming for perfection, scared of rejection, sometimes we forget that part of the beauty of being human is having flaws.

Thank you So much for sharing this :)!

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you enjoyed this so much, Zaisham! Thanks for reading! :)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

This is beautiful. Your words will stop you in a moment of inferiority and have you joyous for what you have accomplished. Ambernight very nice I know exactly. Bravo ! Thank you for sharing and God Bless

Sheer Terror

[DoormanDan]

I'm flattered by your words about my work here. Thank you so much for reading! :)