To Frontiers Faraway

A little reassurance for my parents, who are not yet ready for me to move out into the real world on my own

To Frontiers Faraway

Teardrops glissade down the driveway

As I depart for Frontiers Faraway

Your eyes, they betray your dismay

While also nurturing your acceptance

So, let me share some reassurance

I know that you're not prepared

I know you're sincerely scared

To let me surf those sulfuric skies alone

But you know that I'm aware

You know I know to beware

Of the perils predating between each milestone

I can do this on my own

I'm not carelessly confident

That my future will sing of opulence

Oftentimes, I'm incompetent

But we can only obtain sapience

Through the scoldings of each Consequence

I know that you're not prepared

I know you're sincerely scared

To let me surf those sulfuric skies alone

But you know that I'm aware

You know I know to beware

Of the perils predating between each milestone

I can do this on my own

Destiny is sometimes spontaneous

Whenever she's right, she can be erroneous

And we never know which half will greet us

Until we're already rising or taking a plunge

But fear not what lies in the midnarust

For you're gaining nothing by despairing in dust

Instead, give me every ounce of your trust

When I tell you I'm ready for whatever will come

I know that you're not prepared

I know you're sincerely scared

To let me surf those sulfuric skies alone

But you know that I'm aware

You know I know to beware

Of the perils predating between each milestone

I know that you're not prepared

I know you're sincerely scared

To watch me surf those sulfuric skies alone

But just know that I'll take care

With all decisions and dares

I make as I traverse every single milestone

I must do this on my own

Don't be afraid to let go

I will do this on my own

Author's Note

Damn, I was so far into the writing zone, that I spent FIVE hours writing this in one sitting! Anyway, this piece is for my parents, to reassure them that I'm ready to finally move out and face the real world alone (which is what I'll be doing in less that half a year). Writing this piece was the most fun I've had writing any piece in over half a year! Anyway, as always, tell me what you think!

Oh, and it might be a while before I write anything again, as I start back at college on Monday. Until next time! :)

Reviews

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Some lovely language in this one, Dan.....

The repetition of your second stanza gives it the feel of a song lyric, more than a poetic piece, however, i suppose that was your intention; to reinforce the message to your parents.....that you will take your step into independence alone but with their blessing and guidance and all will be just fine.

This is a very relatable theme; we all do eventually take those same first steps into the big, bad world. It can be daunting but also exhilarating at the same time. It's a true rite of passage. No doubt armed with a cool head and the wisdom of your parents ringing in your ears, you will make this step a successful one for yourself.

A very nice write, Dan. Some great word choices used and generous in its self less execution.

[DoormanDan]

Thank you. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this. You're right with thinking that the repetition was intentional. This is meant to be more like an actual song than just poetry. Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the energy and the drive of the poetry.
"I must do this on my own
Don't be afraid to let go
I will do this on my own"
I agree with the above lines. Sometimes, we must stop and re-set our journey. Thank you Dan for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[DoormanDan]

Very true. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and share your thoughts on this, Coyote. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem my friend and you are welcome.

[Lindsaytot]

Dude this would be the coolest thing ever if you put music to it lol. The word choice is so good, and I love the feeling I get from this!! For real though, this is so good. Keep writing, you'll go far!!

[DoormanDan]

Haha, thanks! I'll try to keep on writing! I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed reading this!! :)

[DoormanDan]

Forgot something; I wish I could add music to this! Unfortunately, my skill lies in just the poetic portion of this process, not in the musical. Maybe someday, though. That would be a major dream come true for me :)

[TwistedTwins]

This was a cute little letter to your parents. I like that you seem confident in your foray into the ever-frightening 'real world'. The only thing that threw me off was your font choice/color choice. It made everything seem more juvenile and not so serious.

[DoormanDan]

I can understand why you think that. I mainly put different colors into this because it's more fun for me than the boring, regular font. I'm forced to be mature enough in every other aspect of life, so I let myself have a wee bit of childish fun from time to time when it comes to font colors on this site XD That, and it's supposed to add a bit more visual appeal to the poetry itself. I used to go over the top with this, but these days, I use it sparingly. Anyway, thanks for reading and sharing your opinion on my writing. My annoyingly consistence lack of confidence in my writing ability appreciates it. :)