Our Love Was Like A Garden

Our Love Was Like A Garden

A Poem by daninstockholm

Our love was like a garden,

Nurturing to the eye while

The roots choked on

Their own soil.  Or maybe

Our love was like

Two redwoods seeking light

But basking in constant rain, or

Our love was like a tease of the

Taste of Crème Brule,

The taste experienced in words only,

Words fail when

That which you want

You can never describe, or was

What we had was only

The unfilled prescription of

Aspirin for the painfully out of love,

It was like

The beauty of flowers

For the blind, it soared like

Arias for the tone deaf, and

It pulsed on the soul like romantic

Poems for the illiterate.

We scrambled to find our way

Like the homeless

 Pleading for inedible food,

The indelible ecstasy

Of the indigestible.

We grew despite it all, and

I filled oceans with our love.

 

 

 


© 2016 daninstockholm



My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

the "was" past tense makes this really sad...but the analogies are magnificent...
"the unfulfilled prescription of Aspirin for the painfully out of love"

no relief for the headache of a relationship that was so good and is now gone...scrambling like the homeless to find reason in fate.

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

I bow to your kindness,, thank you so much, Jacob,, it really makes me happy when people "get" what .. read more



Reviews

The use of past tense makes this incredibly sad. But it's beautiful. The analogies are amazingly brilliant! The bad with the good. Everything a pure love should be. Wonderful piece!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

yes, the good and the bad are at the heart of this piece. Thank you again and I apologize again for .. read more
katie

1 Year Ago

Again! No worries! You're welcome, sir!
There is a painful beauty that breathes through your words, across your journey of loving. A deep, powerful essence lives in the magic of your metaphors.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

thank you so very much, Craig. I truly appreciate your kind words,
"For the blind, it soared like
Arias for the tone deaf, and
It pulsed on the soul like romantic
Poems for the illiterate."

This is poetry for the senses, for the over sized chair by the fireplace. ...beautiful lines throughout, Dan!



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

puts another log in the fire, pours us both a glass of cognac,,, thank you my dear,, I appreciate it.. read more
Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

...my pleasure, Dan!
This is amazing.Very beautifully written :))!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much!! You're very kind!
[send message][befriend] Subscribe
Gee
Yep,with Jacob.Beautifully put together and across.Great work Dan

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!
Even when it doesn't really work out it nourishes...
An interesting look at the many possible faces of love.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

Thank you, my friend!
This is beautifully descriptive and had me worried til it hit the happy ending.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

Thank you for stopping by!
mattavelli

1 Year Ago

My pleasure :)
the "was" past tense makes this really sad...but the analogies are magnificent...
"the unfulfilled prescription of Aspirin for the painfully out of love"

no relief for the headache of a relationship that was so good and is now gone...scrambling like the homeless to find reason in fate.

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

I bow to your kindness,, thank you so much, Jacob,, it really makes me happy when people "get" what .. read more
A really nice write on love. Though there's also a sad tone about it, I think it derives from the past tense you used. Moreover, I like how you structured it and the comparisons you included. A clear, lovely poem. I enjoyed reading.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

daninstockholm

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Vanessa! The sadness was definitely intended, so I'm glad it came through. i always appr.. read more
Closed

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

249 Views
9 Reviews
Rating
Added on January 27, 2016
Last Updated on January 27, 2016
Tags: love, poetry, my own work, gardens, trees, romantic poetry

Author

daninstockholm
daninstockholm

Stockholm, Sweden



About
Time gives us moments made up of empty canvasses. How will you use yours? Happily married male, American born but now happy to be living in Stockholm, loves to learn and experience new things new p.. more..

Writing