Madness

A crazy little write.

In the time of darkness,
Where the greatest rule is madness,
The world is all cruel no forgiveness
You are my world,
You are the reason of my word,
Go, bring your sword.

Once you took everything,
Left me nothing,
Not even life,
Just a knife,
Left in my chest,
Saying, "its for the best"
Maybe I can atleast get some rest.

You killed my soul, torn it apart,
Now don't turn away,
Watch me fall apart.

Author's Note

Any thoughts?

Reviews

[~S.S.A.F.]

the emotion is just breathtaking. you can practically visualize the rope of hope being torn apart. its beyond a heart break. its more of a component of demolishing ones faith. dissecting there emotion and sole till theirs nothing left but a cold, empty hallow vessel left. you can really see the what he or she has done to the main character and how hurt they are. its like shattering a piece of glass and trying to put it back together. theirs no point. you end up giving up. if this was made without any real life experiences then i'm complacently amassed because its so well placed with simple words that its hard to miss the entire meaning of how badly wounded they are from the inside out and the imagery of the knife is perfect, it sums it up and brings everything in complete serenity of the meaning.
Sorry if this doesn't make seance to you cus i do jumble my thoughts a bit when i review but over all i think its astonishing and outstanding work.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :) and its perfectly fine that you write what it makes you think. I like readin what people think. :)

[~S.S.A.F.]

i'm glade, you really are well spoken in this poem. the meaning is simple and strait forward.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Its cuz it usually comes from the heart.

[~S.S.A.F.]

Very true.

[Mara]

wow, i like dark poems and this one is amazing
I love the last stanza

'You killed my soul, torn it apart,
Now don't turn away,
Watch me fall apart'

Thank you for sharing this great piece

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words.
"You killed my soul, torn it apart,
Now don't turn away,
Watch me fall apart."
What is left when the soul is gone and we are dead in spirit? Great use of words. Left the reader with many things to think about. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dani The Unreviewed]

That is the question, isn't it? what is left after nothing is left? kinda hard to imagine...and even harder to define 'nothing'. But if we're talking about a human... Well, what is left, is the hopeless, bored, negative shadow of what the person once was. That happened to me. Anyway, thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Can't lose your soul. Just become black with disappointment and you are welcome. I write a poem about this. "Dance with death". Two brothers committed suicide and I had a loaded 30-30 and I was saved and my soul learned. We must save ourselves and one person at a time,

[Dani The Unreviewed]

True...but that is exactly like loosing it. Anyway, this can be argued for hours, on end... And yes, we should do that.

[Red3Bravo]

Sounds like a tough break-up. A little bit melodramatic for my taste, but nice vivid images, and I like like the way we move from the formless void down in scale to a single shattered person like a mini creation story, simultaneously pulling the protagonist from object of worship down into the realm of the banal with the bit about getting some rest.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Glad you liked it. :) it was written for a contest. No break ups yet. Lol. Thnx.

[Joel Armstrong]

I loved it..
The line referring to the knife...the tragedy /the pain that u have to bear,the feel of betrayal... It contains so much emotion and feel.
The victim here has two choices now... Either fall down and never rise back or remove that knife himself and Bring himself up.the scar that marres ur chest will forever remain but the scar will be forever to keep.itl make us wiser in the future I guess.sorry if I drifted off here.just writing down my thoughts.
Now coming to the the poem itself I think it is very impressive that you have been able to catch so much emotion and meaning in a few lines.
Szép munka!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :) i see you're learnin Hungarian. :)

[A writer]

Hogy szép munka, az biztos. De, te hol tanultál magyarul?

[Joel Armstrong]

Nah.I just googled it.😁😅

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Na, ezt jó volna tudni. Kösz hogy elolvastad. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh...could have guessed. Lol

[A writer]

Lol lol now I'm laughing. :)

[zaisham9393]

Danny I have to say you are not just an amazing person but an awesomeeeeeee writer :))
I am impressed dear friend :)!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you so much :)

[Ellay]

Such an interesting poem :D Loved it!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[Ellay]

You're welcome :)

[Fran Marie]

A poignant piece expressing the heartbreak and pains of love...well written..

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for reading :)

[AaronFreitas]

awesome dark piece... I loved it :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

Wow!!!! So much power in so simple words. It takes someone like you to create such a mind blowing, awesome piece. Well done Danny. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[A writer]

You are always welcome, Danny. :-)