A classic chaos of Danny's mind poem

no one needs to know the meaning of every line. it's no good anyway, so don't even read.

I live here, you see this house?
Not much luxury, just cheap comfort.
Don't look for rest, won't find it.
Not here in death, not beyond, in life.

I won't ask you anything,
So don't answer,
A moment is enough for your lies.

I live here, this is the place.
Everything is motion and timeless,
Still like it was left behind.

Looking for peace,
A wasted effort.
Whatever you see outside,
Whatever's inside,
A crazy duality.

Once living, dead reality,
Heavy sighs of now depressing dreams.
The colors faded, just black and white images of a long dead past.

Seen him, holding on to a single weapon,
Trapped in a nightmare full of restless relentless terror,
Monsters, undead,
Burned pages, unread.

It all used to belong to him,
Now there's just death,
Smell of blood.
Seen him holding on to a weapon covered in sweat.

Afraid of the living,
Afraid of the murderers,
Afraid of the dead,
Afraid of today,
Afraid of tomorrow.

The waters are deep, so take good care.
One mistake is enough...
Dancing in a boat,
The waters are deep, so take good care.
One mistake is enough...
Dancing in a boat,
Would anyone miss you, should the waves close above your head?

Endless terrors in a never loving world,
Far outside of the homelands caring arms.
"You don't belong here."
Simple, still a spider web of complications.

Laying on a cold stone floor,
As a lifeless body.
Unwanted, hated.
No worries tho.
The hatred keeps warmth in the winter of icy ignorance.

A single, bloody tear.
Like the countless others dried already.
A single pure crystal of a doomed life.

So small, meaningless.
Still something captivating,
Just another from the millions,
Still something unseen, unheard of.

The last ounce of life in a dying soul.
I've seen him, clenched fingers on a gun,
Waiting for the bullet of salvation.
Seen the impossible dilemma.
No answer to what happened,
How much to go, before it stops?

A drop of blood on translucent glass,
Revealing a fraction of the wounds.

Shining stainless steel, stained in blood, half way inside his flesh.
Widened eyes of pain.
Pain which is nothin compared to before.

Satisfaction of much needed rest.
Again just a wasted effort.
Another mess in the world of chaos.

Afraid of himself,
Afraid of the undead,
Relentless monster.

Hurt beyond limits of perception.
Numbed out.
Cramps tied around the pieces of a shattered heart,
Labeled as healed.

Standing in a river of blood.
Violence, alcohol.
Smoke of heavy depression.
A single mistake is enough.

Unspoken words deep in the drawers of silence.
Black rays of a corrupted sun,
Bloody, ugly as sin.

Author's Note

Reviews

[dan]

Danny, the choice of music genres for this write HAD TO be metal (this band sounds like Judas Priest or Dio). I love dark writing, used to write darkness almost exclusively (go back in my archives and read "Watch the Specter I and II) and this fits the bill. I don't usually quote poems in my reviews but a lot of passages stand out, especially this one: "You lived too fast...
Just a flash
Burned film.
A passing vision."
That is quality writing, well constructed and well written. One hint: before you post a quality write it makes sense to check spelling and grammar. You don't want someone to read the piece and not like these kinds of errors. Just take a minute and check. Otherwise, very well done. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much my friend. :)
I jus had to use my favorite band (as always)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh, and I read both of the poems you mentioned. I loved them! :D

[dan]

2 questions: Where and how did you find this band? And: I just posted my review 5 minutes ago. You really found and read those 2 pieces in 5 minutes? You've quick on the draw! take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

no. lol. I've read em months ago. while they were fresh. this band is my favorite, since I'm a metal junkie. (four years maybe?) they're around my country since the early eighties.

[dan]

I'm sorry, my mistake...and I also didn't know that you lived somewhere other than US. Sorry...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Just type in "Pokolgép " in YouTube, and you'll get lots of their songs. They're amongst our best rock/metal bands, together with Omen, Ossian, Kalapács, Tankcsapda and such. Might as well call them the Hungarian Guns 'n roses. lol. only much better.
They have a few songs translated to English too.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'm living in Hungary. lol.
And hey, no worries my friend.

[dan]

You're Hungarian? How is your English so good, do they teach that in school over there? Speaking of YouTube, you've heard of Queen, haven't you? In their latter days they were more glam rock, heavily orchestrated, but in the beginning they did some excellent metal. If you've curious go to YouTube and query Queen, "Liar." Kick-a*s metal with some soft underpinnings. Very unique for back in the 1970s. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

we are taught English, German, and you can choose some other language if you like. :) (our language, Hungarian, is the fourth hardest to learn. English is nothing, compared to it :))

[Dani The Unreviewed]

So it's more likely that Hungarians learn someone else's language, than the other person learning Hungarian. lol

[Dani The Unreviewed]

The content of this writing was changed completely, so current reviews might not make much sense.

[McBear]

Feels like the hatred of one is flowing through someones veins. I can feel it! The words and imagery really helped lead this poem up and up higher. :D

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hatred? not my primary goal, but yea. there's that too. however, nobody found the real deal in it, as in about what is this, and why I wrote it. still. I'm hoping someone will get it. Like ...it's nothing too hard to understand.

[Joel Armstrong]

I can pretty much feel the thump of the music from the words. It's been well written my friend.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hehehehe :p I jus had to write something evil...lol. thank you. :)
(but as always ...messages are hidden everywhere ...;))