Moving on

Not real creative, just something I wrote. Hope you like it. Suggestions will make my day (smile)

 

When I was there in your arms,

Nothing could make me leave

I won't move on

 

My feelings of love are strong

Chaining me to you with black shackles

I can't move on

 

But when you left like the wind

I am alone, a puppet without its strings

I could move on

 

I still yearn, wanting and waiting

Wishing for those days to come back

I should move on

 

Still crying, I begin to move to other things

Trying to forget and run away from the truth

I would move on

 

The darkening pain has ceased to

An occasional pang when I think of you

I can move on

 

Seeing the way I've been, I can't help but smile

How foolish, how blind I had been

I will move on

 

I shift my eyes to the rolling gray mist

Of tomorrow, ever-moving and ever-changing

I am moving on

 

Days, months pass, I start to forget

What I had so desperately wanted

I moved on

 

Even though the memories were painful

There is a place in my heart for you

I will remember

 

Author's Note

Suggestions?

Reviews

[Leaner Pastures]

I really like the progression from "won't" to "can't" to "will remember". You've captured the essence of grieving and recovering from a lost love.

Currently in the "Should" to "Would" stage, knowing the "Will" stage is out there. Thank you for reminding me of the Road Map.

[Elizabeth]

This is lovely. It really resonated with me, "

The darkening pain has ceased to

An occasional pang when I think of you

I can move on"
By far, my favorite part.

[deeps]

I like this I think it's wonderful

[Aradie Rain]

No matter the pain, eventually we all move on. The memories however may fade, but never go away

[sicada]

This is very touching and very relateable. This is very good!
I really like all the last sentences on all the stanzas.

[Kriss]

I've looked at a lot of poems about moving on and this was the only one that i think really captured the steps and emotions that people go through. I really enjoyed it.

[Dianna Reneé]

I really love this poem. It describes something that in one point in time, everyone has gone through. It's a really difficult thing but you mastered describing all the emotions perfectly.

[Adeline]

This is excellent, you have no need for suggestions. Keep writing! :))

[Dysis]

This was wow. I really enjoyed reading it. =) Great job!

[Hotel Mornings]

Love this. This nails exactly what I am going through. Well, maybe I haven't gotten to the last few sets on moving on. haha.