Love in the ice

Love in the ice

A Poem by Aldora Sparrow
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made out of boredom. Ironically made in the summer...

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Looking into your eyes, are you still afraid to love?

Over the years, are you still scared to remember someone? I can feel your warmth so

Very close. Like ice, the embraced heart begins to thaw

Even if fate’s mischief pains your heart, a single ray of light shines

Into the rippling darkness. I know it’s

Not your fault those hands are freezing

Those scars borne from those childish days

How could you pretend not to see the other side of words?

Even the coldest of hearts can flow with scalding tears

If it was me, I’d make your heart warm once more

Could you let me embrace your hardened heart?

Even if it’s momentary, I’ll let you know my love

 

Love in the ice…

© 2010 Aldora Sparrow


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Waaa! Just like the DBSK song. Such and ingenious idea!
I really enjoyed this cuz it reminded me of when I wrote this one shot
for a contest entitled "Love in the Ice" haha, sorry about going sidetracked there.
Anyways...I really enjoyed is and it flowed nicely. I'm so glad I just happened to
come online today. I've really missed reading your work ^_^

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is really beuatiful, I enjoyed this.


Posted 13 Years Ago


This is beautiful..

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice...ice is great methaphor...when love need certainty and its answered when its tested, great job

Posted 13 Years Ago


No suggestions because I think it is wonderful! I love the format and how well you got your point across. Good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really enjoyed reading this, your vocabulary choices were amazing, and the poem was full of emotion. It was so well written that I didn't realize it was an acrostic poem until I read the comments. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Your insight is wonderful. On your profile you said you're not very good at poetry, but everything I've read to far is fabulous! So inspiring. Keep writing!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, I loved how you made this an anagram :) this is a lovely poem! Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice..
a fine acronym poem..
some lines though are a bit too long..
making it a little bit forced..
just to achieve your desired acronym..
but that's just me..
other than that..
good write..


Posted 13 Years Ago


love in the ice indeed...but i think,it'll melt...

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is real good, for just making it up at random...it would take me quite awhile to make a poem like this...but I really admired it and it inspired me, thanks and keep up the amazing work!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Aldora Sparrow
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I have been writing for longer than I can remember, but it was only during 7th grade did I start to write outside of class. I am still inexperienced and I love helpful comments. I love to write fa.. more..

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