Nightmare

Nightmare

A Poem by Not here

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,
full of everyone else's blasphemy.
There's no escape, and no way out;
you just to wait for it to play out.
So take a second to just look around
because this is the new home you've found.
Don't you remember back in the day
when everybody lived life in the way
that nowadays seems so un-phased.
We lived and did what we pleased. They
could not affect our display
that we chose to put on. Hey,
we used to be so amazing
until we let them begin fazing
us with their unnatural sayings.
"You're not good enough, you're just playing.
This isn't your thing, start praying
if you want to begin slaying
these giants in your way, weighing
you down again." They're swaying
your opinion right? Betraying
what you believe is dismaying
and will not help at all. Preying
beasts are surveying
you're scared carcass. Perhaps
you already look like scraps
because you're walking into traps
by giving up. If you collapse
I can promise you'll relapse
back and be stuck in the gaps
created by the fall.
I hope you have someone to call
when you begin to crawl
back to the finish line. All
of your hope was given away
when you spent the entire day
alone and without a friend.
This nightmare has no end.
It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,
full of everyone else's blasphemy.
There's no escape, and no way out;
you just to wait for it to play out.
So take a second to just look around
because this is the new home you've found.
It's insane and automatic
shocking through me like some crazy static.
Electricity never felt so alive
even if I won't exactly do what I call thrive.
I'm on a road to a climatic,
fanatic and often dogmatic
finish to my problematic
trail through all this darn traumatic
stress that's beating upon me.
How am I supposed to be free
of this pain, shame, and insane fear
when I can't get over it drawing near
while it continues to quite frankly jeer
at me. This is my richest year
but haunted by this nightmare clear.
If I could just have a hope to escape
then maybe my plans could take shape
but as for me now, I must roam
and hope to find a different home.
It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,
full of everyone else's blasphemy.
There's no escape, and no way out;
you just to wait for it to play out.
So take a second to just look around
because this is the new home you've found.

© 2015 Not here


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Amazing use of words and thoughts. I had to read again. Always a pleasure to read your words Mr. Dante.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

thank you coyote :) im glad you liked it and thank you for all of the reviews
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

My pleasure and you are welcome.
Just reading this and some other writing of yours I assume that religion was forced down your throat like mine. This really makes me relate. My parents dragged me every time the damn doors were open. When I turned from the path though they basically disowned me. I hope you find peace. Stay strong and follow your spirit. If something is right for you, you will know. Sometimes religion or faith doesn't help at all. I found my own spiritual path. I don't think there is too much of a specific label for me, but I'm more at peace than before. It's okay to be different. :) xo karma

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

thanks for the encouragement :) im just confused and different but im alright
FlatLineBeauty

8 Years Ago

Different is a wonderful thing. I do understand the confusion. You were born original, never die a c.. read more
Nice Write.. Like your style..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

yeah yeah yeah mon :) thanks
Superb alliteration in this modern day reality version of a Grimms tale. We lost our way didn't we?
top notch wordsmithing here DK.


Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

wordsmithing...thats some superb wordsmithing right there
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david, This piece is again written in your trademark stream-of-consciousness style, but it has a more finite delineation you impart with your framework that supports the entire write. The three 'choruses' throughout the piece help to construct that framework and help to define your ideas. I don't usually like quoting specific lines in my reviews, but I especially loved this one: "If you collapse I can promise you'll relapse back and be stuck in the gaps created by the fall." One of your better works, nice job! take care...dan



Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

thank you alot dan :) and best of luck to you man with everything man
Blowing work.
Great rhythm and flow.
Great read as always.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This flows like an eminem or linkin park song.
Totally edgy.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

lol :) ive heard alot of people say that
this poem flows like a river I can say it was the best I read of urs ur a natural and don't need help u know how to make it flow and how to make the reader want more and nightmares can do that to u most the time that play over and over in ur head never to go away never stop writing for I belive u will go far

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this write my friend. Very deep and passionate write! I think in the 4th line you have an extra to in the line... good write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


David: This is by far your greatest work. I love it...you kept the flow throughout, poem wrap or both it is fabulous work. You are talented and I'm so glad you kept it out. The words you speak are an accumulation of frustration about the changing world in which we have no control and you are loud and clear my friend, and so right. It can be a nightmare to feel trapped in society's dogma, not allowing self-expression, so many rules and some make no sense at all; great insight for a young man. Please keep writing. One suggestion, would be I must roam this crazy dome and find a different home. I thank you so very much. Dale

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not here

8 Years Ago

thank you alot dale :)
Confuser

8 Years Ago

You're welcome....

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