The Proverb

Ask me a question.

Show me the star.

Give me a moment

to reach that far.

Show me some beauty,

show me the stars.

Pass me the puzzle,

then hide behinds bars.

I'll roll the dice.

You pull the strings.

Give me your life

and I'll teach you some things.

Make me a monster.

Or make me a man.

Mention the murder,

then show me the plan.

Smile with teardrops,

puddles of rain.

Show me your fingers,

some cuts through the brain.

Show me the puzzle.

Show me the key.

I wonder how lucky

someone can be.

Starting a war,

starting a peace.

Piece of a puzzle,

just please release.

Give me to silence.

Love me to death.

Show me the puzzle

picture of your breath.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think this all means ;) If you want to personal message me, I'll give you the meaning of this poem to me, but otherwise I keep things a secret. I'll gladly let you know if you personal message me.

Reviews

[Tamika Finley]

I enjoyed this one. The word choice was beautiful and the format of the work somehow went along with the flow of the poem. What I got out of the poem was taking a chance and trusting that everything will work out in the favor of everyone included. Just asking for a chance to prove the other's thoughts true or otherwise. Thanks for sharing.

[Not here]

Thanks for the review :) I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the poem! That's a very inriguing take on it.

[Tamika Finley]

No problem and thanks. :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

I liked it. The meaning to it I think will vary, depending on the place the reader is at when they read it.

Well done

[Not here]

Tank you H.L. :) And I agree. The meaning is different for people.

[Stan Lee]

I have no idea :) but i liked it. Smile with tear drops - yup, can relate to that sometimes. Love me to death - I like that too. Nice easy flowing rhymes Dante. :) Keep smiling

[Not here]

Lol I've been going through a weird lyrical phase lately. Writing what some see as nonsense, but having a meaning behind all of it. Ya know :) I'm glad you still find it good.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very beautiful and also clever write, Dante. Well done. :) Rudi

[Not here]

thank you Rudi :) I appreciate it

[Philip Muls]

Playful and clever poem. Good format.

I wonder how lucky somebody can be. That sentence seems the key to a deeper understanding but I cannot quite get there...

[Not here]

thank you Phillip :) I appreciate. Just keep thinking on it. There are a lot of themes in this poem, from jealousy to self-doubt, to anxiety, to needing.

[Rafy T.Nym]

"with teardrops,
of rain.
me your fingers,
cuts through the brain."- I love these lines most, because I think the combination of sadness and soothing feeling is wise. But "me your fingers, cuts through the brain"- this line can literally give me nightmares.

This poetry is simple in structure, but the combination of different feelings such as-trust, insecurity, chaos, also a little bit of love that is somehow hidden has made this quite complicated. Much creative!

[Not here]

thank you Rafy :) I really appreciate it, and I'm glad you liked this.

[andrew mitchell]

Its like life is a gamble. An excellent write Dante.

[Amy R]

Love the artistic format you portrayed!
As always ur poems are getting better and better!
So keep up the great works!

[Not here]

thank you Amy :) I appreciate it. I'm glad you think so.

[Amy R]

ur welcome David :)

[forevermore1218]

the cuts through the brain part triggered me. I don't really know what you're trying to say only because I have a lot of different ideas going through my head. It's freaky and I love it!

[Not here]

thank you forevermore :) I appreciate it. I was going for freaky lol. I'm glad you liked it!!

[guy drori]

I like the format you used and wrote it in. The rhyming added to the flow as well.

[Not here]

thank you :) I'm glad you liked this