The Secretive Priest (Short Poem)

The Secretive Priest (Short Poem)

A Poem by Not here

I killed a man.
He called my name.
I killed him as I lost the game.
I killed a girl.
She told me so.
I killed her as I painted snow.
I killed a boy.
He cried to me.
I killed him as I set him free.
I have a secret.
No one knew.
I had a secret. I'll show you.

© 2016 Not here


Author's Note

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If you want to personal message me, I'll give you the meaning of this poem to me, but otherwise I keep things a secret. I'll gladly let you know if you personal message me.

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I kinda love this...
The mystery added to it honestly makes it so much better.
You can take it literally, emotionally, maybe about a mental illness.
Any way you interpret it it is amazingly written and flows really well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Thanks Riley :) That's a good guess at it! I really appreciate all the reviews, I can't say that eno.. read more
Awesome poem!
Loved it!
Keep it up!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Thanks Emily :)
Strange ans mysterious poem, Dante. Well done, thank you for sharing this riddle/poem with us. :) Rudi

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Thanks Rudi :) I really appreciate it.
A interesting poem. I wanted to read and know more. You left a wide open ending. Thank you Dante for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Thanks :) I appreciate the review and i'm glad you liked it. That was the feel I was aiming for.
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You reached your goal and you are welcome.
Scary! This sounds really dark. I hope the true meaning is less sinister than what i am envisaging! Nice rhythm & rhyming Dante. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Thanks smiley face :) And the world may never know. Whawhawha.
This is a very haunting writing. I like the stanza breakdown and the flow within each stanza. The last line, "I had a secret. I'll show you..." sure makes me not want to let her show me her secret, big grin. Only one small typo, you line, "I killer her as I painted snow..." should be killed right?

Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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7 Years Ago

Yes very true on the typo. I"ll fix it. Thanks for catching it. And I'm really glad you liked the po.. read more

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