A Window That Won't Open

But I thought we were perfect.
You said we were fine.
I expected love 'cause
You said you were mine.

Now you say it's hard
To feel love when it's not.
What happened to the masterpiece
Together we had wrought.

And after all the blood
You say you love me still.
It's just hard to feel you say,
Leaning on the window sill.

And my cuts are deep and bleeding.
My hands are one big bruise.
You asked would I do it again.
I know what I will choose.

Reviews

[Meraki]

Heartache. One of the hardest and easiest things to write about, like cooking eggs. Nice work.

^that's an odd analogy isn't it?

[Not here]

All very true and yes very odd analogy but I love it!

[Stan Lee]

I expected love 'cause
You said you were mine

Beautiful. :) Nicely written poem Dante. Nice length, story and rhymes.

[Not here]

Thank you very much :) Im glad you liked

[dan]

david, such a simple little rhyme that says so much! Your line in the third stanza, "leaning on the window sill..." places the reader RIGHT THERE gazing out that window forlornly. Really strong line.
Comparing this to all your LONG pieces is tricky, but I like the sentiment, the pain invoked. Great bit of writing. take care...dan

[Not here]

Thank you Dan :) I have started writing some shorter pieces lately so I am glad they are effective

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

My favorite stanza here is this one:
"Now you say it's hard
To feel love when it's not.
What happened to the masterpiece
Together we had wrought."

Thanks for sharing!

[Not here]

Thanks for reviewing :) I'm really glad!

[zaisham9393]

This poem hit home for me. this is how i feel right now, to be honest.
Thank you for sharing !

[Not here]

I'm glad you could relate though :) Than you very much.

[Philip Muls]

'But I thought we were perfect.'
This is very recognizable, we have all been there. When one of the partners in a relationship did not see it coming...
Once you are in that stage, indeed you can pull until your hands bleed, but the window will not open again.
Well done.

[Not here]

That's a very insightful view of the poem, dang, and exactly what I was going for. I'm glad you enjoyed the read :)