Tale Of The Drunken Skull

 

Rattled bones

Shake the confidence

Of a man

Who use to be

Comfortable

In his own skin…

Who lived for the thrill

Of the flesh.

 

Now the years

Of neglect

Of what made him

Vulnerable

Has caused

haunting decay.

 

What once he hid away

Beneath mortal masquerades.

Has shattered

to the ground

when he lost the ability

to hold it in.

 

All those years

Of gin under the bridge

 now washed out

The road to happiness

Till the city of hope

Had became

The city under the sea.

 

Walking the Earth

with hazy vision

Hindsight is now

A double life

Stumbling its way

To the afterlife.

 

I tell you no lie,

You can see it in

The dark holes

That was once his eyes,

This is the tale

Of a drunken skull

That cannot

Hold his liquor. 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

How did I miss this fabulous story, I must have been drinking. ;) Fifth stanza is money....!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I think it was when you were away for a few weeks taking care of stuff… thank you so much, so glad you enjoyed it Moonbeam.

[Frieda P]

I think you're right, unfortunately I wasn't drinking....was my pleasure, this was great Dale.

[Patricia]

First let me say thank you so much for sending me a read request! Now, the poem- it is simply wonderful. The word choices were brilliant and it has a grit and ruggedness, like men- which is appealing. Great stanzas and the middle alignment works well for this poem. The closing stanza was just awesome. The third stanza I love the best! Great piece of poetry. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you so much… wow you are making me blush with all those wonderful compliment about my poem.

[Patricia]

LOL I am sure you wear it well :)))

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are too sweet :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I think when you lose the ability to keep it in you become Human ....the superhero and the dark rider live still within the soul but nature has taken in full the debt. Shhhhhh... I was Wonderwoman I still wear my cape beneath my clothes:P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I won't tell a soul, LOL… thank you for expressing your thoughts.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good tale. It is a bad day when the liquid overtake the drunken skull. Would be a site to see. Thank you for the excellent and entertaining poetry my friend.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much, glad you enjoyed it.

[Marie]

THis makes me imagine a skull as a drinking cup. Interesting, if gruesome concept.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks Marie, the pic was the inspiration for the peace.

[StrixNebulosa]

The paths we have known, the paths we have been saved of... that is what this means to me... I think I have tried every path to shy away from the right one... Im thankful and humbled to be where I am today... not that its easy, far from it, just that its right, just, and worth it... what worth it came easy anyhow? I see that this pen is dark but for me its like looking back at shadows from the light. Thank you for this reminder.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for sharing your deep insight, I really like what you took from this poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Ah how brilliant this write is Dale... it speaks of many things, just in one (maybe lifetime) to bear with...

- Elisa

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you again, that pic was an inspiration but it is a sad reality in this world.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is amazing. the faves. What a great write. Sorry, no critiques, just praise.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh well thank you, I appreciate your kindness and so glad you enjoyed this one.

[John Stussy]

Damn man, you knocked out a hell of a poem from that pic. I hope mine turns out half as good as your take, this was an awesome read. You captured the character's desolation quite aptly.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

We;; thank you kindly, I am sure yours will be much better than mine. I will say that pic is a great inspiration though.

[John Stussy]

Well, seeing as how you've posted yours without me posting mine yet, I'd say that you win haha. I've been having this stupid issue with writers block where I've gotten a couple lines, but neither anything to fill them out nor nothing to connect them. I dunno how to fix that yet. :/ I've tried but thus forth it always seems, to me at least, very forced. All my work over the past 2 years has that same feel. :/

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Alcohol and cigarette are just the same. They will make you look old but actually they WON'T make you get old because you will die YOUNG with them.

Nice one for reflection. So relevant.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much for sharing your thoughts.